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A crime related news are detailed covered in newspaper and telivision. Some people say that there should be government interception. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

A crime related news are detailed covered in newspaper and telivision. Some people say that there should be government interception. v. 1
Waste recycling and people’s participation in it is a moot issue and a lot of arguments could be observed among people as well as in the media regarding whether people should spontaneously take part in recycling process or the government should make it a legal obligation. I personally believe that government should impose laws and severely fine the violation of it to ensure proper misuse recycling. First, waste recycling is done by the state and citizens are expected to properly divide the recyclable and non-recyclable wastages and pack them accordingly while dumping them in recycling bins. They are expected to cooperate greatly in the recycling process. However, it is a strange fact that many people do not participate in it spontaneously either from their negligence or from their lack of time to do so. Second, it is a harsh truth that people in many cases abide by a rule only from the concern of punishment or fine, not from their conscience. For instance, when the penalty for traffic rule violation went up, people started following them in my city. Similarly, if laws are introduced and the authority starts penalises, more people would recycle more of their wastages. Third, waste recycling is a very handy process to save our environment and we already have many rules to protect our environment. While deforesting is a severe crime in my country, there is no visible law for not recycling the waste. This is why people are very careless about their waste products and this has created a throwaway society in our country. This is why proper laws are required. In conclusion, most of the citizens in our country already know about the importance of saving the environment and how individual efforts of recycling can improve environmental conditions. Since many of them still do not participate in waste recycling, there is no alternative than to impose laws to have this done.
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and
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people’s
participation in it is a moot issue and
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a lot of
arguments could
be observed
among
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people
as well
as in the media regarding whether
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people
should
spontaneously
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take part
in
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recycling
process or the
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government
should
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make
it a legal obligation. I
personally
believe that
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government
should impose
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laws
and
severely
fine the violation of it to ensure proper misuse recycling.

First
,
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waste
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recycling
is done
by the state and citizens are
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expected
to
properly
divide the recyclable and non-recyclable
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wastages
and pack them
accordingly
while dumping them in
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recycling
bins. They are
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expected
to cooperate
greatly
in the
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recycling
process.
However
, it is a strange fact that
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many
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people
do not participate in it
spontaneously
either from their negligence or from their lack of time to do
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so
.

Second, it is a harsh truth that
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people
in
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many
cases abide by a
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rule
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only
from the concern of punishment or fine, not from their conscience.
For instance
, when the penalty for traffic
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rule
violation went up,
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people
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started
following them in my city.
Similarly
, if
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laws
are introduced
and the authority
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starts
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penalises
, more
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people
would recycle more of their
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wastages
.

Third,
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waste
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recycling
is a
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very
handy process to save our
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environment and
we already have
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many
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rules
to protect our environment. While deforesting is a severe crime in my country, there is no visible
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law
for not
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recycling
the
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waste
. This is why
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people
are
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very
careless about their
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waste
products and this has created a throwaway society in our country. This is why proper
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laws
are required
.

In conclusion
, most of the citizens in our country already know about the importance of saving the environment and how individual efforts of
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recycling
can
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improve
environmental conditions. Since
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many
of them
still
do not participate in
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waste
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recycling
, there is no alternative than to impose
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laws
to have this done.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay A crime related news are detailed covered in newspaper and telivision. Some people say that there should be government interception. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
317 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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