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Why do some people choose to read the news on the internet rather than in a newspaper? How is Internet news different from the news you read in the newspaper? Will internet news ever replace newspapers? (why/why not? ) v.1

Why do some people choose to read the news on the internet rather than in a newspaper? How is Internet news different from the news you read in the newspaper? Will internet news ever replace newspapers? (why/why not? ) v. 1
Year by year passing the buildings are getting older. There are several buildings in our society which are getting too old. People are likely to get repair the property, if any damage embarked. Others argue that people should demolish the old ones and try to adopt new buildings. Let's discuss the both sides which will be elucidated in this passage. Firstly, Constructing a new building is not that much possible It lends a lot of money but this is necessary to do. To exemplify, we had seen in the newspapers there is a school which was constructed a long time ago, students likely to attend the classes daily, but one day there is heavy rainfall property can not control that much rain and it was dilapidated and the result is students suffered from injuries. This type of buildings should be denied and government should be responsible for this because they have to check each building and should think about safety measures of the people. For this type of buildings, government should embrace new ones. On the other hand, There is an immense population in urban areas so, People are willing to live in some old apartments. For example, If there is any problem with the property like damage to walls, broken glass, in proper staircase for these types of small things people can replace with new ones and no need to demolish and construct new buildings. When it comes threat to human life, even small issues better to go with new one. Depend upon the damage people should aware of whether to go with existing or new one. To sum up, Construction new building is nothing but there is severe damage in the existing one. I tend to reiterate, people should check the old building before they spend on them it is quite useful or not. If we do not see its impact on us.
Year by year passing the
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buildings
are getting older. There are several
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buildings
in our society which are getting too
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old
.
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People
are likely to
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get
repair the property, if any
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damage
embarked. Others argue that
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people
should demolish the
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old
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ones
and try to adopt
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new
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buildings
.
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Let
's discuss the both sides which will
be elucidated
in this passage.

Firstly
, Constructing a
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new
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building
is not that much possible It lends
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a lot of
money
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but
this is necessary to do. To exemplify, we had
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seen
in the newspapers there is a school which
was constructed
a long time ago, students likely to attend the classes daily,
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but
one day there is heavy rainfall property can not control that much rain and it
was dilapidated
and the result is students suffered from injuries. This type of
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buildings
should
be denied
and
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government
should be responsible for this
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because
they
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have to
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check
each
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building
and should
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think
about safety measures of the
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people
. For this type of
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buildings
,
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government
should embrace
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new
ones.

On the other hand
, There is an immense population in urban areas
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so
,
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People
are willing to
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live
in
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some
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old
apartments.
For example
, If there is any problem with the property like
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damage
to walls, broken glass, in proper staircase for these types of
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small
things
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people
can replace with
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new
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ones
and no need to demolish and construct
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new
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buildings
. When it
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comes
threat to human life, even
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small
issues better to
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go with
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new
one. Depend upon the
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damage
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people
should aware of whether to
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go with
existing or
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new
one.

To sum up, Construction
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new
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building
is nothing
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but
there is severe
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damage
in the existing one. I tend to reiterate,
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people
should
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check
the
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old
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building
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before
they spend on them it is quite useful or not.
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If
we do not
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see
its impact on us.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Why do some people choose to read the news on the internet rather than in a newspaper? How is Internet news different from the news you read in the newspaper? Will internet news ever replace newspapers? (why/why not? ) v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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