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A city wants to help teachers of its high school students (age14-18)improve their teaching. It is considering two plans: 1. Choose a small group of excellent teachers; these teachers will attend a class led by an expert for additional training in how v.1

A city wants to help teachers of its high school students (age14-18)improve their teaching. It is considering two plans: 1. Choose a small group of excellent teachers; these teachers will attend a class led by an expert for additional training in how v. 1
It is sometimes argued that news channels should concentrate on reporting more good news than bad news. While it may be beneficial to publish good news, it is also essential for individuals to be aware of the unfortunate happenings around them. Both sides will be analysed in this essay. On the one hand, the media should focus on publishing good stories because doing so may boost the morale of the public. When people are aware of positive happenings around them, especially if those events are linked to them, they are better able to maintain a good mental state. For example, King David, who was the first leukemia survivor in Nigeria, reported how his hope of surviving was kept alive after he read about a newly discovered chemotherapy regimen in Vanguard newspaper. As this example shows, the media has an indispensable role to play in maintaining a mentally stable community by publishing motivating news. Although tragic news such as civil wars, natural disasters and terrorist attacks are disheartening, it would be misguided to introduce restrictions on reporting them. This is because the awareness of these events can motivate the public to solve these global problems. For instance, in Nigeria, since the media started reporting bad news regarding the effects of global warming in different parts of the world, Nigerians have become more proactive about their individual efforts in reducing global warming, such as using public transport and reducing air trips per year. This will have been impossible if people are unaware of contemporary issues. Hence, bad news needs to be reported to facilitate harnessing concerted efforts to solve problems. In conclusion, while awareness of cheerful news is good for one’s mental health, it should not be published at the expense of tragic reports. It is hoped that media agencies and the public learn to regard both equally.
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argued that
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channels should concentrate on reporting more
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good
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news
than
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bad
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. While it may be beneficial to publish
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good
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, it is
also
essential for individuals to be aware of the unfortunate happenings around them. Both sides will be
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in this essay.

On the one hand, the
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media
should focus on publishing
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good
stories
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because
doing
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so
may boost the morale of the
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public
. When
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people
are aware of
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positive
happenings around them,
especially
if those
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events
are linked
to them, they are better able to maintain a
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good
mental state.
For example
, King David, who was the
first
leukemia survivor in Nigeria, reported how his hope of surviving was
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kept
alive after he read about a
newly
discovered chemotherapy regimen in Vanguard newspaper. As this example
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shows
, the
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media
has an indispensable role to play in maintaining a mentally stable community by publishing motivating news.

Although tragic
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news
such as civil wars, natural disasters and terrorist attacks are disheartening, it would
be misguided
to introduce restrictions on reporting them. This is
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because
the awareness of these
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events
can motivate the
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public
to solve these global problems.
For instance
, in Nigeria, since the
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media
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started
reporting
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bad
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news
regarding the effects of global warming in
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different
parts of the world, Nigerians have become more proactive about their individual efforts in reducing global warming, such as using
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public
transport and reducing air trips per year. This will have been impossible if
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people
are unaware of contemporary issues.
Hence
,
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bad
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news
needs to
be reported
to facilitate harnessing concerted efforts to solve problems.

In conclusion
, while awareness of cheerful
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news
is
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good
for one’s mental health, it should not
be published
at the expense of tragic reports. It
is hoped
that
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media
agencies and the
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public
learn to regard both
equally
.
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IELTS essay A city wants to help teachers of its high school students (age14-18)improve their teaching. It is considering two plans: 1. Choose a small group of excellent teachers; these teachers will attend a class led by an expert for additional training in how v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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