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Your child is going on a 3 day school trip to another country The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go Write a letter and Say why would you like to go on the trip Suggest what you could do to help during the tri v.1

Your child is going on a 3 day school trip to another country The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go Write a letter and Say why would you like to go on the trip Suggest what you could do to help during the tri v. 1
Teachers are essential assets of our society and there are multiple perspectives to what they are responsible for. It is generally believed by some that teachers are only responsible for directing students academically. On the contrary, many think that teachers are accountable for moulding an individual perspective and compelling them to rights and wrongs in their life. Nevertheless, In this essay I will discuss both perspectives at length and discuss why I believe in the latter one. Firstly, some people are of the opinion that teachers are solely responsible to teach from the books, that they should not be accountable for shaping an individual moral compass. Such individuals, mostly believe that despite the student spending considerable time with their teachers it is not their responsibility to construct the character of the individual. It is often put forward that teachers should leave this for parents to do it. For instance, if a student is involved in any dubious activity the teacher should ask their parents to try to teach their child to rectify it instead of doing it on their own. However, another school thought reckons that teachers should hold the responsibility of shaping an individual, as so that the individual would behave right believe that teachers should go beyond their academic responsibilities and preach an individual the moral, cultural, and social values of the society that they prevail in so that they might not digress from the right path. For example, a student who acts as a bully in school needs to be taught the right path by the teacher primarily and than by their parents. Conclusively, my opinion is that although, teachers should be responsible to teach students the righteous path and that they should go beyond their call of their duty, it is equally the parent's duty to ensure that their children understand, adapt and culture the rights and the wrongs in their routine life so that it can result in their children being morally, socially and emotionally upright.
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and wrongs in their life.
Nevertheless
, In this essay I will discuss both perspectives at length and discuss why I believe in the latter one.

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moral compass. Such
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individuals
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should ask their parents to try to teach their child to rectify it
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the moral, cultural, and social values of the society that they prevail in
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that they might not digress from the
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path.
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who acts as a bully in school needs to
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Conclusively
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to teach
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students
the righteous path and that they should go beyond their call of their duty, it is
equally
the parent's duty to ensure that their children understand, adapt and culture the
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rights
and the wrongs in their routine life
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so
that it can result in their children being
morally
,
socially
and
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upright.
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IELTS essay Your child is going on a 3 day school trip to another country The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go Write a letter and Say why would you like to go on the trip Suggest what you could do to help during the tri v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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