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A/D The government wants to improve the education of high schools, and there are two plans: 1. Choose a group of good teachers and train them first, and after that let them go back to their schools and train other teachers. 2. Provide training for every tea v.1

A/D The government wants to improve the education of high schools, and there are two plans: 1. Choose a group of good teachers and train them first, and after that let them go back to their schools and train other teachers. 2. Provide training for every tea v. 1
Nowadays, in order to improve the highschools' education, there are two methods. One is trainning a group of good teachers first then let them teach other teachers; another way is allowed them to study individually through online materials. Actually, I do assert second one is a superior selection. One advantage of studying lecture on internet is can be dominated by teachers themselves. It' s flexibility is embodied in the time is not be fixable,   teachers can also have their own pace by arranging their time. Moreover, everyone ' s learning ability is different, so the unified process would  lead to personal inadaptation.   For instance, some teachers always like compress a mouth' s course to complete within a week; others prefer to have a little bit of progress everyday. In this regard, learning through online materials is more suitable for each teacher' s arrangement of time. Secondly, lecture on the internet enables teachers to modify their teaching methods promptly and more conductive to student' s learning. Since teachers can study the materials during the time of preparing for courses, they will have an opportunity to use the new knowledge in class. By this way, in not only avoids spending a long period of time in digesting a large sum of knowledge, but also provides a way to detect whether apply to students or not. However, teachers can' t confirm this without student' s input. Besides, teacher use new teaching approach can make students' study be more efficiency. Take the present teaching as an example, with images and sounds can make the learning progress be more lively. Adopting this method as soon as possible allowed students to have interest in studying, thus improving the enthusiasm and raise efficiency. To sum up with, learning by online material is better for teacher who want to keep their working progress and modify their teaching methods timely. It can be beneficial whether for teacher or student.
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trainning
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good
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let
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teachers
; another way is
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allowed
them to study
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through online
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materials
. Actually, I do assert second one is a superior selection.

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be dominated
by
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teachers
themselves.
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It&
#039; s flexibility
is embodied
in the
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time
is not
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fixable,
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teachers
can
also
have their
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own
pace by arranging their
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time
.
Moreover
, everyone ' s
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learning
ability is
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different
,
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so
the unified process would
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lead to personal
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inadaptation
.
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For instance
,
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some
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teachers
always like compress a
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mouth&
#039; s course to complete within a week; others prefer to have a
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little bit
of progress
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everyday
. In this regard,
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learning
through online
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materials
is more suitable for each
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teacher&
#039; s arrangement of time.

Secondly
, lecture on the internet enables
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teachers
to modify their
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teaching
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methods
promptly
and more conductive to
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student&
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learning
. Since
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teachers
can study the
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materials
during the
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time
of preparing for courses, they will have an opportunity to
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use
the new knowledge in
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class
. By this way, in not
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avoids spending a long period of
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time
in digesting a large sum of knowledge,
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also
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students
or not.
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,
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teachers
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can&
#039; t confirm this without
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student&
#039; s input.
Besides
,
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teacher
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new
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approach can
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students&
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teaching
as an example, with images and sounds can
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make
the
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learning
progress be more lively. Adopting this
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method
as
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soon
as possible
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allowed
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students
to have interest in studying,
thus
improving the enthusiasm and raise efficiency.

To sum up with,
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learning
by online
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material
is better for
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teacher
who want to
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keep
their
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working progress
and modify their
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teaching
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methods
timely. It can be beneficial whether for
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teacher
or
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student
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay A/D The government wants to improve the education of high schools, and there are two plans: 1. Choose a group of good teachers and train them first, and after that let them go back to their schools and train other teachers. 2. Provide training for every tea v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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