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8. Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education. Agree or disagree. v.2

8. Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education. Agree or disagree. v. 2
Nowadays, criminals also are confined to the prison in most countries over the world. But an increasing number people are concerned about that the more amount solution is to education people with the highest education. In my own perspective, I completely agree disagree with this opinion. One the one hand, there are several reasons that prison is alive at the moment. Prison can help reduce criminals. The simple reason that they are product defects of social, and they need to repair that. It will be helped them understanding about their mistake. Murderers, for instance, must be imprisoned for many years and such a punishment may act as a deterrent. They must know that they will face loss their liberty in a long time. Moreover, some criminals cannot education because they violate big wrongdoing and prison is the end place where they live until they go to hell. For example, rapists are the dirty criminals. They must go to prison and they never have special amnesty because they make their victims who will become fear. One the other hand, I consider that education has a complementary role to play. Firstly, in school, the student must learn about their law. The reason that they will enrich knowledge and broaden the horizon about rules. Having some knowledge of the law, the student will avoid the crime. For example, youngsters must study the important laws about driving and road safety. Secondly, in the prison themselves, education programs must aim to provide prisoners with skills and qualifications to find work when they released. In conclusion, I think that the government should keep their prison because it is a better tool for them to education prisoners.
Nowadays,
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criminals
also
are confined
to the
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prison
in most countries over the world.
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But
an increasing number
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people
are concerned
about that the more amount solution is to
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education
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people
with the highest
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education
. In my
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own
perspective, I completely
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agree
disagree with this opinion.

Did you mean "on"?
One
the one hand, there are several reasons that
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prison
is alive at the moment.
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Prison
can
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help
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reduce
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criminals
. The simple reason that they are product defects of social, and they need to repair that. It will be
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helped
them
The verb 'It' is used with an infinitive: "to understand" or "understand".
understanding
about their mistake. Murderers,
for instance
,
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must
be imprisoned
for
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many
years and such a punishment may act as a deterrent. They
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must
know that they will face loss their liberty in a long time.
Moreover
,
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some
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criminals
cannot
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education
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because
they violate
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big
wrongdoing and
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prison
is the
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end
place where they
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live
until they go to hell.
For example
, rapists are the dirty
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criminals
. They
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must
go to
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prison and
they never have special amnesty
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because
they
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make
their victims who will become fear.

Did you mean "on"?
One
the other hand, I consider that
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education
has a complementary role to play.
Firstly
, in school, the student
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
learn about their law. The reason that they will enrich knowledge and broaden the horizon about
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
. Having
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some
knowledge of the law, the student will avoid the crime.
For example
, youngsters
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must
study the
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important
laws about driving and road safety.
Secondly
, in the
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prison
themselves,
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education
programs
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must
aim to provide prisoners with
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skills
and qualifications to find work when they released.

In conclusion
, I
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think
that the
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government
should
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keep
their
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prison
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because
it is a better tool for them to
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education
prisoners.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay 8. Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education. Agree or disagree. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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