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Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people a better education. Agree or disagree. v.3

Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people a better education. Agree or disagree. v. 3
Providing punishment to the offenders, assist to curb the issue of offences, and for that reason in many nations, the usual method is to send criminal in the lock-up. Apart from this, there are other potential solutions available which are beneficial to overcome crime such as by educating people, along with giving vocational training. I agree with the latter view because most of the unlawful acts occur in order to fulfil own's desire which can be either the basic one or to live a luxurious life. To commence with, the number of people who commit the crime are not only illiterates, but also suffering from the unemployment. In other words, some individuals attempt felonies to complete their fundamental needs, whereas others do to live a glamorous life. Therefore, to sort out such problem, education is the best method. For instance, if person get education, he will acquire the skill by which he can participate in any social activity or in any work. Consequently, it becomes a win-win situation for both because the person gets remuneration and society becomes crime free. Moreover, the government should render the job opportunities which aid to decline the rate of unemployment. It means that people can get a job without any difficulties, and able to earn enough money through which they can fulfil their necessities. As a result, crime can be diminished because there is no reason for the masses to do misdeeds. Apart from this, if culprits go into the prisons, instead of improving their own mistakes, they learn to carry out more felony from other criminals. Thus, to solve the matter of offence, it is better to provide education. To core out, instead of sending lawbreakers into the Jailhouse, countries should render education, in addition, they have to create more job opportunities. By doing so, it is not only helping wrongdoer to be an ideal citizen of the community, but also fruitful to solve the issue of crime.
Providing punishment to the offenders, assist to curb the issue of
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offences
, and for that reason in
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many
nations, the usual method is to
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send
criminal in the lock-up. Apart from this, there are
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other
potential solutions available which are beneficial to overcome
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crime
such as by educating
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people
, along with giving vocational training. I
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agree
with the latter view
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because
most of the unlawful acts occur in order to fulfil
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own's
desire which can be either the basic one or to
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live
a luxurious life.

To commence with, the number of
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people
who commit the
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crime
are not
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only
illiterates,
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but
also
suffering from the unemployment. In
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other
words,
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some
individuals attempt felonies to complete their fundamental needs, whereas others do to
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live
a glamorous life.
Therefore
, to sort out such problem, education is the best method.
For instance
, if person
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get
education, he will acquire the
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skill
by which he can participate in any social activity or in any work.
Consequently
, it becomes a win-win situation for both
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because
the person
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gets
remuneration and society becomes
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crime
free.

Moreover
, the
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government
should render the job opportunities which aid to decline the rate of unemployment. It means that
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people
can
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get
a job without any difficulties, and able to earn
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enough
money through which they can fulfil their necessities.
As a result
,
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crime
can
be diminished
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because
there is no reason for the masses to do misdeeds. Apart from this, if culprits go into the prisons,
instead
of improving their
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own
mistakes, they learn to carry out more felony from
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other
criminals.
Thus
, to solve the matter of
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offence
, it is better to provide education.

To core out,
instead
of sending lawbreakers into the Jailhouse, countries should render education,
in addition
, they
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have to
create more job opportunities. By doing
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so
, it is not
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only
helping wrongdoer to be an ideal citizen of the community,
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but
also
fruitful to solve the issue of
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crime
.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people a better education. Agree or disagree. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
6
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