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8. You have had problems with a changing room in a sports center. You have made some complaints but nothing has been done about it. Write a letter to the manager stating: – The issues with the changing rooms– What has been done about it– What you wan v.1

8. You have had problems with a changing room in a sports center. You have made some complaints but nothing has been done about it. Write a letter to the manager stating: – The issues with the changing rooms– What has been done about it– What you wan v. 1
A number of people believe that a day with no personal cars should be performed. This essay will discuss the advantages, including environment with less pollution and less noise. This essay will also show the disadvantages that probably can happen, including crowded public transport. Firstly, on the bright side, banning the use of a person's own car can lead to less passage congestion. Most of the people have their vehicles nowadays causing traffic jam. For example, prohibiting those cars would reduce the number of automobiles on the road resulting in less traffic congestion. Moreover, it is not only beneficial to reduce pollution because of the vehicle exhaust reduction, but also causes less noise. Secondly, one of the main disadvantages, that could happen, is crowded public transportation because it is the only mean available. Furthermore, the limited public transportation is not enough to meet the demands of the huge number of people in the city. For instance, the bus has limited seats, so some people will sit while others had to stand during the trip. This makes passengers tired and uncomfortable, especially who is travelling to work destinations. Another disadvantage is that people cannot reach on time, however, using their own vehicles would let them go anywhere at any chosen time. To conclude, people think that it is good to prevent the use of private vehicles for 24 hours. It has some benefits including reduction of traffic congestion and less pollution. Other people argue that it has some drawbacks including crowded public transportation and people cannot reach work on time which put them in trouble.
A number of
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people
believe that a day with no personal cars should
be performed
. This essay will discuss the advantages, including environment with
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less
pollution and
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less
noise. This essay will
also
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show
the disadvantages that
probably
can happen, including crowded
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public
transport.

Firstly
, on the bright side, banning the
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use
of a person's
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own
car can lead to
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less
passage congestion. Most of the
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people
have their
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vehicles
nowadays causing traffic jam.
For example
, prohibiting those cars would
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reduce
the number of automobiles on the road resulting in
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less
traffic congestion.
Moreover
, it is not
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only
beneficial to
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reduce
pollution
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because
of the
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vehicle
exhaust reduction,
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but
also
causes
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less
noise.

Secondly
, one of the main disadvantages, that could happen,
is crowded
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public
transportation
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because
it is the
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only
mean available.
Furthermore
, the limited
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public
transportation is not
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enough
to
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meet
the demands of the huge number of
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people
in the city.
For instance
, the bus has limited seats,
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so
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some
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people
will sit while others had to stand during the trip. This
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makes
passengers tired and uncomfortable,
especially
who is travelling to work destinations. Another disadvantage is that
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people
cannot reach on time,
however
, using their
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own
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vehicles
would
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let
them go anywhere at any chosen time.

To conclude
,
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people
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think
that it is
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good
to
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prevent
the
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use
of private
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vehicles
for 24 hours. It has
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some
benefits including reduction of traffic congestion and
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less
pollution. Other
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people
argue that it has
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some
drawbacks including crowded
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public
transportation and
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people
cannot reach work on time which put them in trouble.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay 8. You have had problems with a changing room in a sports center. You have made some complaints but nothing has been done about it. Write a letter to the manager stating: – The issues with the changing rooms– What has been done about it– What you wan v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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