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74. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Leaderships come naturally. One cannot learn to be better. Use specific reasons to support your answer. v.2

74. Leaderships come naturally. One cannot learn to be better. Use specific reasons to support your answer. v. 2
People have different ideas about the concept of whether or not people cannot learn to be a leader. Some people believe that leadership is an instinctive skill that people are born with. Some people think that people need to learn to become a leader. In my opinion, being a leader is not easy, one has to learn from real life and books. I will explore my ideas in the following essay. First of all, life is a learning process. Let’s take the situation of a baby. A baby has to learn basic skills, such as she or he has to learn from how to crawl to be able to stand up or from speaking the basic words like papa, mama before he or she can speak a sentence. To be a leader is harder. In fact, no one can become a leader or become an excellent leader on the first try. A leader has to cover most work in the company, such as running finance, communicating with other companies, and knowing the trends of customers. These complex tasks require one a lot of abilities that mean one has to learn a lot from real life experiences. My uncle is a compelling example of this case. After his father retired from his business two years ago, he took his father’s place to manage to the company. In the beginning, he thought that he did not need to learn anything, he just needed to follow what his father did in the past. However, after two weeks of working as a director, he had to deal with a lot of problems about the financial difficulty and human resource management in his company. Eventually, he applied several courses on the internet to learn about business administration. Another reason is that many university offer business administration courses for students to learn how to manage to a company or group. That means educators understand that students need to learn this skill. If people believe that leadership comes naturally, why do people have to spend any amount of time and money to learn it? In fact, to become a leader, one not only has to learn a lot from books but also one has to observe and learn from real life, from other people and from one’s failures also. In conclusion, life is learning process. Nothing can come naturally. For two reasons, which I have just mentioned above, I strongly believe that people need to learn from real life and books to be good leaders.
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whether or not
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cannot
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to be a
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leader
.
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people
believe that leadership is an instinctive
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people
are born
with.
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people
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people
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need
to
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learn
to
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become
a
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leader
. In my opinion, being a
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leader
is not easy, one
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has to
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learn
from
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real
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life
and books. I will explore my
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ideas
in the following essay.

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First of all
,
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life
is a learning process.
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Let
’s take the situation of a baby. A baby
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learn
basic
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skills
, such as she or he
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has to
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learn
from how to crawl to be able to stand up or from speaking the basic words like
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papa
,
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mama
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before
he or she can speak a sentence. To be a
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leader
is harder. In fact, no one can
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become
a
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leader
or
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become
an excellent
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leader
on the
first
try. A
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leader
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has to
cover most work in the
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company
, such as running finance, communicating with other
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companies
, and knowing the trends of customers. These complex tasks require one a
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lot
of abilities that mean one
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has to
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learn
a
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lot
from
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real
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life
experiences. My uncle is a compelling example of this case. After his father retired from his business two years ago, he took his father’s place to manage to the
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company
. In the beginning, he
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thought
that he did not
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need
to
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learn
anything, he
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just
needed to follow what his father did in the past.
However
, after two weeks of working as a director, he had to deal with a
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lot
of problems about the financial difficulty and human resource management in his
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company
.
Eventually
, he applied several courses on the internet to
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learn
about business administration.

Another reason is that
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many
university offer business administration courses for students to
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learn
how to manage to a
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company
or group. That means educators understand that students
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need
to
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learn
this
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skill
. If
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people
believe that leadership
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comes
naturally
, why do
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people
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have to
spend any amount of time and money to
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learn
it? In fact, to
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a
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leader
, one not
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from books
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also
one
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observe and
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from
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real
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life
, from other
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people
and from one’s failures
also
.

In conclusion
,
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life
is learning process. Nothing can
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come
naturally
. For two reasons, which I have
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just
mentioned above, I
strongly
believe that
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people
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need
to
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learn
from
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real
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life
and books to be
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good
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leaders
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
60Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay 74. Leaderships come naturally. One cannot learn to be better. Use specific reasons to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
418 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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