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73. Some believe that the students should do some part-time jobs or summerinterns to determine their future career. Do you agree or disagree with theopinion and why? v.1

73. Some believe that the students should do some part-time jobs or summerinterns to determine their future career. with theopinion and why? v. 1
Public libraries are a powerhouse of knowledge and are meant for use by the general public. Modern-day public libraries also include all kinds of technological resources such as computer software, videos, DVDs, etc. Apart from books. Some people believe that public libraries should stick to their main utilitarian purpose of providing books and should shun the practice of keeping additional media resources. This essay will discuss why this notion is entirely unacceptable to the extent of being illogical and irrelevant in the present-day context. Traditional public libraries have been known as the hub of the dispensation of essential, literary as well as non-literary, sources of knowledge to the masses. Not only the educated and learned have attained enormous benefits from it, but it also has been a means of learning & acquiring knowledge for the uneducated ones. With the advent of modern-day computers, tablets & e-book readers, more and more people are opting for e-books, and so there has been a drastic decline in the book readers opting for the regular printed books. For the same reasons, to stay relevant to the changing trends public libraries have started keeping media resources. For instance, it has been estimated that the number of people opting to visit libraries for e-resources have shot from 10% in 2009 to 57% in 2019. Such a significant rise in user preferences and behaviour clearly highlights the need for the shift in the allocation of library resources, pertaining to being relevant to the majority of users. Admittedly, it is noteworthy that public libraries still find a segment of people visiting libraries only for studying and borrowing books. The option of having myriad choices of books at a considerable economical borrowing price entices many booklet readers to prefer public libraries. Such kinds of people may opt to prefer digital media as a priority for reading. It can be aptly illustrated by the fact that according to a survey, for an average public library, 70% of its revenue comes from novel borrowing services. Making book renting the cash cow and the main source of earning a stream of a public library. All in all, a public library has a wide variety of people it needs to cater to and therefore it should stay relevant in terms of delivering for the needs of both of them. In conclusion, the need for the nation to stop putting digital content in public libraries is highly relevant and more so will become illogical if a library is not able to cater to its majority of its users.
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libraries are a powerhouse of knowledge and
are meant
for
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use
by the general
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public
. Modern-day
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public
libraries
also
include all kinds of technological resources such as computer software, videos, DVDs, etc. Apart from
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books
.
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Some
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people
believe that
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public
libraries should stick to their main utilitarian purpose of providing
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books
and should shun the practice of keeping additional media resources. This essay will discuss why this notion is
entirely
unacceptable to the extent of being illogical and irrelevant in the present-day context.

Traditional
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public
libraries have
been known
as the hub of the dispensation of essential, literary
as well
as non-literary, sources of knowledge to the masses. Not
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only
the educated and learned
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have
attained enormous benefits from it,
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but
it
also
has been a means of learning & acquiring knowledge for the uneducated ones. With the advent of modern-day computers, tablets & e-book readers, more and more
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people
are opting for e-books, and
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so
there has been a drastic decline in the
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book
readers opting for the regular printed
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books
. For the same reasons, to stay
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relevant
to the changing trends
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public
libraries have
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started
keeping media resources.
For instance
, it has
been estimated
that the number of
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people
opting to visit libraries for e-resources have shot from 10% in 2009 to 57% in 2019. Such a significant rise in user preferences and
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behaviour
clearly
highlights the
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need
for the shift in the allocation of library resources, pertaining to being
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relevant
to the majority of users.

Admittedly
, it is noteworthy that
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public
libraries
still
find a segment of
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people
visiting libraries
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only
for studying and borrowing
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books
. The option of having myriad choices of
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books
at a considerable economical borrowing price entices
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many
booklet readers to prefer
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public
libraries. Such kinds of
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people
may opt to prefer digital media as a priority for reading. It can be
aptly
illustrated by the fact that according to a survey, for an average
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public
library, 70% of its revenue
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comes
from novel borrowing services. Making
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book
renting the cash cow and the main source of earning a stream of a
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public
library. All in all, a
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public
library has a wide variety of
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people
it
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needs
to cater to and
therefore
it should stay
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relevant
in terms of delivering for the
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needs
of both of them.

In conclusion
, the
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need
for the nation to
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stop
putting digital content in
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public
libraries is
highly
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relevant
and more
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so
will become illogical if a library is not able to cater to its majority of its users.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay 73. Some believe that the students should do some part-time jobs or summerinterns to determine their future career. with theopinion and why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
424 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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