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61. When travelling, some people prefer to reach the destination directly. Someothers prefer to stop and look around the scenery along the way. What kindof way of travelling do you think is better and why? v.1

61. When travelling, some people prefer to reach the destination directly. Someothers prefer to stop and look around the scenery along the way. What kindof way of travelling do you think is better and why? v. 1
It is thought by many people that printed books, which are considered to be the vital means of information and recreation, are not as popular as used to be among the readers. In my opinion, while I believe that paper made books are still preferred by elderly people, I agree that today usage of the internet is of top priority to attain knowledge and to entertain. On the one hand, it is often believed that books have lost their value in the digital age, even so, this is not the case as older age group chooses to read printed books instead of other sources in order to keep themselves abreast of societal issues and to spend their pastime. That is to say, they are unfamiliar with the utilization of other ways of infotainment and therefore feel comfortable whilst reading books of multiple genres as per their interest and intellect. For example, a recent survey found that around 60℅ people aged 55 enjoy reading printed books since they consider them more useful to gain considerable insight into several subjects. Thus, this shows that books read by such people are still a reliable and authentic source for them regardless of highly advanced sources of entertainment and knowledge. Having said that, I think despite printed books, the internet is being used by an overwhelming number of people to learn ample things and enjoy free time. This is because countless sites and applications that entail pictorial representation of difficult concepts to make easier, online lectures, and latest material to broaden one's horizon. Meanwhile, one can listen to music and watch any movies online with ease. That is why the majority of youngsters discover it easier to use electronic libraries and YouTube channels not only to hone their skills, but also to de-stress their minds as compared to paper made books which prove that printed books are taken over by e-learning. In conclusion, although I believe that digital learning has become the major source of information and entertainment for the people, the paramount importance of printed books can never be underrated because it is still used by certain age groups owing to their reliability and accuracy. 33
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, this is not the case as older age group chooses to read
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books
instead
of other
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sources
in order to
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themselves abreast of societal issues and to spend their pastime.
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to say, they are unfamiliar with the utilization of other ways of infotainment and
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feel comfortable whilst reading
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books
of multiple genres as per their interest and intellect.
For example
, a recent survey found that around 60℅
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people
aged 55 enjoy reading
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printed
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books
since they consider them more useful to gain considerable insight into several subjects.
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of entertainment and knowledge.

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, the internet is being
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used
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to learn ample things and enjoy free time. This is
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countless sites and applications that entail pictorial representation of difficult concepts to
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easier, online lectures, and latest material to broaden one's horizon. Meanwhile, one can listen to music and
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watch
any movies online with
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.
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why the majority of youngsters discover it easier to
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their minds as compared to paper made
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books
which prove that
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printed
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are taken
over by e-learning.

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, although I believe that digital learning has become the major
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of information and entertainment for the
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people
, the paramount importance of
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can never
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still
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by certain age groups owing to their reliability and accuracy.

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7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
I am always sorry when any language is lost, because languages are the pedigrees of nations.
Samuel Johnson

IELTS essay 61. When travelling, some people prefer to reach the destination directly. Someothers prefer to stop and look around the scenery along the way. What kindof way of travelling do you think is better and why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
361 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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