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I do not have any words to express myself After being involved in an accident, you were looked after by a person you did not know before. Write a special thank you letter to express your gratitude. •Introduce yourself and let him/her know why you are wri v.1

I do not have any words to express myself After being involved in an accident, you were looked after by a person you did not know before. Write a special thank you letter to express your gratitude. •Introduce yourself and let him/her know why you are wri v. 1
Due to the significant improvement in the field of healthcare, the average lifespan of human tends to be increasing, especially, in the advanced nations. This trend had given rise issues. This essay will discuss some of these problems and suggest potential solutions to mitigate them. Despite this positive development, the rising life limit had created several issues. Firstly, it is related to the increase in the population of senior citizens who be eligible to receive a pension from governments. This means the budget that the government has to allocate for this group in order to ensure the basic living standard automatically increased. Moreover, this huge amount may lead to a deficiency of funding in other fields. Secondly, this phenomenon also added a great burden on the working population ages. As elder people are more prone to health-related issues and diseases, youngsters are the only members of the family who take responsibility for maintaining a stable income and taking care of their parents. There are some feasible solutions should be put into practice in order to overcome these issues. Firstly, the government should raise the retirement age. For example, in Vietnam, the current pension age ranges from 55 to 60 depending on their gender. Instead of this, if the aged people are healthy and can afford to work, they should be allowed to work till 65. This measure may help the government to diminish the responsibility towards this age group. Secondly, in developed countries, medicine and health services should deliver at a lesser cost for older people. As a result, they will have more opportunities to treat their illness at an affordable price and live without relying much on their offspring. In conclusion, I believe that living longer will be a positive thing if we can find out a number of solutions to deal with these negative effects.
Due to the significant improvement in the field of healthcare, the average lifespan of human tends to be increasing,
especially
, in the advanced nations. This trend had
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given
rise
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issues
. This essay will discuss
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some
of these problems and suggest potential solutions to mitigate them.

Despite this
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positive
development, the rising life limit had created several
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issues
.
Firstly
, it
is related
to the increase in the population of senior citizens who be eligible to receive a pension from
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governments
. This means the budget that the
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government
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has to
allocate for this group in order to ensure the basic living standard
automatically
increased.
Moreover
, this huge amount may lead to a deficiency of funding in other fields.
Secondly
, this phenomenon
also
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added
a great burden on the working population
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ages
. As elder
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people
are more prone to health-related
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issues
and diseases, youngsters are the
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only
members of the family who take responsibility for maintaining a stable income and taking care of their parents.

There are
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some
feasible solutions should
be put
into practice in order to overcome these
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issues
.
Firstly
, the
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government
should raise the retirement
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age
.
For example
, in Vietnam, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
pension
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age
ranges from 55 to 60 depending on their gender.
Instead
of this, if the aged
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people
are healthy and can afford to work, they should be
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allowed
to work till 65. This measure may
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help
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
to diminish the responsibility towards this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
group.
Secondly
, in
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developed countries
, medicine and health services should deliver at a lesser cost for older
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people
.
As a result
, they will have more opportunities to treat their illness at an affordable price and
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live
without relying much on their offspring.

In conclusion
, I believe that living longer will be a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
thing if we can find out a number of solutions to deal with these
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effects.
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IELTS essay I do not have any words to express myself After being involved in an accident, you were looked after by a person you did not know before. Write a special thank you letter to express your gratitude. •Introduce yourself and let him/her know why you are wri v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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