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70. Some people like to buy new and expensive books while others prefer to buy old and cheap ones. Which would you prefer? v.1

70. Some people like to buy new and expensive books while others prefer to buy old and cheap ones. Which would you prefer? v. 1
To have many options to choose from is a common experience in the modern way of life. Although I believe this statement to be true, I do not believe it as the whole body of truth and in a comprehensive point of view, new things are to be considered. People these days have numerous choices. It is an accepted statement in my view. The diversity is an undeniable fact emerged more than ever before in the life of the human in the third millennium. For instance, one can select among many dishes in a restaurant at an affordable price, can opt for an endless list of TV or net-based channels, broadcasting many diverse contents and so on. Despite the fact explained above, I still believe we are also more than any time limited. By speculating the matter of "difference", it is revealed that it is a devised one of the most cases. instead of a genuine one. There are different paths to choose, but all ending to a single preselected destination I mean. For example, one can choose to study any subjects in the university; but at the end he or she should most probably work in a system, serving the interests of some super-wealthy capitals. For example, many engineers, writers, psychologists and marketers work for some few factory owners to sell their products and convince the community the subsequent irreversible environmental damages are not that much important to be concerned. The case of TV channels is also similar. They may present different genres, but they most often represent the same political ideals. For instance any type of movies or even cartoon these days involve eroticism as a fixed part. To summarize, I would like to paraphrase my ideas as even though we are exposed to many chances of selection, the options are not always truly different ones, but mostly different-looking.
To have
many
options to choose from is a common experience in the modern way of life. Although I believe this statement to be true, I do not believe it as the whole body of truth and in a comprehensive point of view, new things are to
be considered
.

People
these days have numerous choices. It is an
accepted
statement in my view. The diversity is an undeniable fact emerged more than ever
before
in the life of the human in the third millennium.
For instance
, one can select among
many
dishes in a restaurant at an affordable price, can opt for an endless list of TV or net-based channels, broadcasting
many
diverse contents and
so
on.

Despite the fact
explained
above, I
still
believe we are
also
more than any time limited. By speculating the matter of
"
difference
"
, it
is revealed
that it is a devised one of the most cases.
instead
of a genuine one. There are
different
paths to choose,
but
all ending to a single preselected destination I mean.
For example
, one can choose to study any subjects in the university;
but
at the
end
he or she should most
probably
work in a system, serving the interests of
some
super-wealthy capitals.
For example
,
many
engineers, writers, psychologists and marketers work for
some
few factory owners to sell their products and convince the community the subsequent irreversible environmental damages are not that much
important
to
be concerned
. The case of TV channels is
also
similar. They may present
different
genres,
but
they most
often
represent the same political ideals.
For instance
any type of movies or even cartoon these days involve eroticism as a
fixed
part.

To summarize
, I would like to paraphrase my
ideas
as
even though
we
are exposed
to
many
chances of selection, the options are not always
truly
different
ones,
but
mostly
different
-looking.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay 70. Some people like to buy new and expensive books while others prefer to buy old and cheap ones. Which would you prefer? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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