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70. s2. Some people like to buy new and expensive books while others prefer to buy old and cheap ones. Which would you prefer? v.1

70. s2. Some people like to buy new and expensive books while others prefer to buy old and cheap ones. Which would you prefer? v. 1
In this present world, the usage of technology is constantly on the rise. Even classrooms are among the many places that enjoy the usage and benefits of automation. It is disagreed that classroom teachers will be totally substituted for technology. Analysing the incapability of disciplining classroom students with technology, as well as the limitation in the learning process of students taught with technology will prove this. Firstly, a robotic teacher made with artificial intelligence would lack sufficient control over its classroom students. For instance, it is widely known that kids need to be thoroughly watched by their teachers to be sure that they take their class works seriously and do not fool around when classes are going on. Sadly, this is a task robotic teachers will be incapable of carrying out. Therefore, this makes it clear that classroom teachers will never be totally substituted for technology. Secondly, the learning process of students would be disrupted if they are taught by robotic teachers, which may slow down some students’ ability to comprehend information taught in lessons. For example, kids love to be motivated before lessons are taught effectively. This is a quality that many human teachers have but robotic teachers do not have. Thus it becomes apparent that human teachers will never be replaced with robotic teachers in a classroom. To summarise, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for automation.
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technology
is
constantly
on the rise. Even classrooms are among the
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many
places that enjoy the usage and benefits of automation. It
is disagreed
that classroom
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teachers
will be
totally
substituted for
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technology
.
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Analysing
the incapability of disciplining classroom
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students
with
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technology
,
as well
as the limitation in the learning process of
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students
taught with
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technology
will prove this.

Firstly
, a
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robotic
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teacher
made with artificial intelligence would lack sufficient control over its classroom
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students
.
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, it is
widely
known that kids need to be
thoroughly
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watched
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teachers
to be sure that they take their
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class
works
seriously
and do not fool around when classes are going on.
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, this is a task
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robotic
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teachers
will be incapable of carrying out.
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, this
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makes
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that classroom
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teachers
will never be
totally
substituted for technology.

Secondly
, the learning process of
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students
would
be disrupted
if they
are taught
by
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robotic
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teachers
, which may slow down
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some
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students’
ability to comprehend information taught in lessons.
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love
to
be motivated
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before
lessons
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effectively
. This is a quality that
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many
human
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teachers
have
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robotic
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teachers
do not have.
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it becomes apparent that human
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teachers
will never
be replaced
with
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robotic
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teachers
in a classroom.

To
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summarise
, a
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robotic
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teacher
does not have the necessary disciple to
properly
give instructions to
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students
and actually works to retard the ability of a
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student
to comprehend new lessons.
Therefore
, it is
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clear
that the
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idea
of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot
be supported
. After thorough analysis on this subject, it
is predicted
that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the
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positive
effects, and
because of this
, classroom
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teachers
will never
be substituted
for automation.
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IELTS essay 70. s2. Some people like to buy new and expensive books while others prefer to buy old and cheap ones. Which would you prefer? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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