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8. Some students save their textbooks. Others sell them back to the school’sbookstore. Which would you do? v.1

8. Some students save their textbooks. Others sell them back to the school’sbookstore. Which would you do? v. 1
There are few persons who claim that accepting a poor condition, like an unsuitable employment or lack of cash, is better. Also, there are others who think it is best to work and enhance such circumstances. In my opinion, I believe every problem has a solution and it can be solved by studying the scenario and finding a workaround for it. On one side, some moves on with the current situation, however bad it is. For example, these kind of people continues working for the same company how much ever unsatisfying the job is. The reason for it being, the fear of taking risks like changing jobs. These individuals are afraid of losing their current employment once they start searching for another. Thus, they are convinced to accept their problem and carry on with it. However, on the other side, there are the ones who find these issues as challenging. They analyse the areas they went wrong and find a path to overcome it. For instance, if they are running out of money, they deal with it by balancing their income and expenditure. Further more, it enables them to be financially stable. Finally, in my opinion, I feel it is exciting to take challenges in life. Once they overcome the struggles, they can be a motivation to others who are walking in the same shoes as they were. Furthermore, it makes a person more productive, be it in their finances or work life.  They will, for sure, climb the ladder of success. In conclusion, even if some feel accepting a poor state is good, there are others who believe one should not stick to it. However, I think it is more effective for a person to grow through these issues.
There are few persons
who
claim that accepting a poor condition, like an unsuitable employment or lack of cash, is better.
Also
, there are others
who
think
it is best to work and enhance such circumstances. In my opinion, I believe every problem has a solution and it can
be solved
by studying the scenario and finding a workaround for it.

On one side,
some
moves
on with the
current
situation,
however
bad
it is.
For example
,
these kind
of
people
continues working for the same
company
how much ever unsatisfying the job is. The reason for it being, the fear of taking
risks
like changing jobs. These individuals are afraid of losing their
current
employment once they
start
 searching for another.
Thus
, they
are convinced
to accept their problem and carry on with it.

However
, on the
other
side, there are the ones
who
find these issues as challenging. They
analyse
the areas they went
wrong
and find a path to overcome it.
For instance
, if they are running out of money, they deal with it by balancing their income and expenditure.
Further
more, it enables them to be
financially
stable.

Finally
, in my opinion, I feel it is exciting to take challenges in life. Once they overcome the struggles, they can be a motivation to others
who
are walking in the same shoes as they were.
Furthermore
, it
makes
a person more productive, be it in their finances or work life.  They will, for sure, climb the ladder of success.

In conclusion
, even if
some
feel accepting a poor state is
good
, there are others
who
believe one should not stick to it.
However
, I
think
it is more effective for a person to grow through these issues.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay 8. Some students save their textbooks. Others sell them back to the school’sbookstore. Which would you do? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
288 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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