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1. If you planned to become an elementary school teacher, would you take anelective course on child psychology or on physical education? v.1

1. If you planned to become an elementary school teacher, would you take anelective course on child psychology or on physical education? v. 1
The use of public transport is an excellent means to commute, especially within the cities. The use of trains is the most convenient ways to shuttle within the city centres. In my opinion, I agree with this viewpoint because the metro helps commuters avoid traffic gridlock and reduce environmental pollution. To begin, the choice of moving within the city through metro helps commuters avoid traffic congestion. As the train systems operate using a scheduled plan and timing, hence, it is impossible to experience train-track congestions unlike the roads. Therefore, people, who choice the train will arrive at their destination faster compared to others who travel by buses. For instance, John West, a businessperson, who spend two hours commuting to work daily due to delays caused by traffic gridlock, opted for the metro system. He noted that he arrived at his destination within 20minutes. An achievement he attributed to the programmed movement of the train system, which made it possible to avoid traffic congestion challenges. Another point to consider is that individual’s preference for metro system will help reduce environmental pollution. This means that, people’s choices of train will reduce the number of vehicles plying the roads and the emission of greenhouse gases released into the atmosphere by those vehicles. A reduction of these dangerous gases helps prevents the ozone layers from deterioration. For example, in 2018, the Lagos State Ministry of Transport enforced that all commuters within the Mainland area should use the trains as a means of transportation. This directive helped the authority reduce the number of cars in operation daily by 80%; thereby prevent further destruction of the ozone layer. To conclude, I agree that using public transport, especially the metro, which is the most convenient mode of moving within the city is great because it helps individual avoid traffic congestion and lessens environmental contamination.
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environmental pollution.

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helps
commuters
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avoid
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traffic
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congestion
. As the
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train
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systems
operate using a scheduled plan and timing,
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unlike the roads.
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people
, who choice the
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will arrive at their destination faster compared to others who travel by buses.
For instance
, John West, a businessperson, who spend two hours commuting to work daily due to delays caused by
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traffic
gridlock, opted for the
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metro
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system
. He noted that he arrived at his destination within 20minutes. An achievement he attributed to the programmed movement of the
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train
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system
, which made it possible to
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avoid
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traffic
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congestion
challenges.

Another point to consider is that individual’s preference for
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help
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reduce
environmental pollution. This means that,
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’s choices of
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the number of vehicles plying the roads and the emission of greenhouse gases released into the atmosphere by those vehicles. A reduction of these
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gases
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helps
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the ozone layers from deterioration.
For example
, in 2018, the Lagos State Ministry of Transport enforced that all commuters within the Mainland area should
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use
the
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trains
as a means of transportation. This directive
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helped
the authority
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reduce
the number of cars in operation daily by 80%; thereby
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prevent
further
destruction of the ozone layer.

To conclude
, I
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that using public transport,
especially
the
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metro
, which is the most convenient mode of moving within the city is great
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because
it
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helps
individual
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congestion
and lessens environmental contamination.
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IELTS essay 1. If you planned to become an elementary school teacher, would you take anelective course on child psychology or on physical education? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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