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6. A. The popularity of news media often has significant influence on people’s lives. Some people believe this to be a negative development. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

6. A. The popularity of news media often has significant influence on people’s lives. Some people believe this to be a negative development. v. 2
There is no doubt that the television is the most watched news' medium. With its increasing recognition, the impact it has on people is also rising. Although there are some benefits, I believe its disadvantages far outweigh the advantages. Firstly, nowadays the news has moved away from traditional hard-hitting journalism. This is mainly because the channels are more business oriented, they have to earn good profits in order to survive. For instance, what used to be the prime time slot, is now viral videos from social media shown to the public. Additionally, 50 years ago, you would have not imagined watching police car chase on the news. Consequently, people do not trust this medium anymore, and moving away to social media such as Facebook and Twitter. Secondly, With increased popularity, there are thousands of these channels. The competition is getting harder, they all try to cover the same story, which results in often lost facts and misleading information. In order to gain an edge over competitors, stories are often run with negligence and almost no fact checking. For example, Arushi murder case in New Delhi was covered by every channel for several months. In the end, everybody had a different viewpoint than the police. As a result, public's opinion about them have changed, they are now considered as an unauthentic source of information. To conclude, unless there are drastic changes in the rules governing news media, this problem will only escalate. Meanwhile, as responsible citizens, we should not consume any information blindly, and most importantly, we should not get influenced by them.
There is no doubt that the television is the most
watched
news' medium. With its increasing recognition, the impact it has on
people
is
also
rising. Although there are
some
benefits, I believe its disadvantages far outweigh the advantages.

Firstly
, nowadays the
news
has
moved
away from traditional
hard
-hitting journalism. This is
mainly
because
the channels are more business oriented, they
have to
earn
good
profits in order to survive.
For instance
, what
used
to be the prime time slot, is
now
viral videos from social media shown to the public.
Additionally
, 50 years ago, you would have not imagined watching police car chase on the
news
.
Consequently
,
people
do not trust this medium anymore, and moving away to social media such as Facebook and Twitter.

Secondly
, With increased popularity, there are thousands of these channels. The competition is getting harder, they all try to cover the same story, which results in
often
lost facts and misleading information. In order to gain an edge over competitors, stories are
often
run with negligence and almost no fact checking.
For example
,
Arushi
murder case in
New
Delhi
was covered
by every channel for several months. In the
end
, everybody had a
different
viewpoint than the police.
As a result
, public's opinion about them have
changed
, they are
now
considered as an unauthentic source of information.

To conclude
, unless there are drastic
changes
in the
rules
governing
news
media, this problem will
only
escalate. Meanwhile, as responsible citizens, we should not consume any information
blindly
, and most
importantly
, we should not
get
influenced by them.
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IELTS essay 6. A. The popularity of news media often has significant influence on people’s lives. Some people believe this to be a negative development. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
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