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51. Describe an object which is very important to you and explain why it is ofspecial value to you. Please include specific details in your explanation. v.1

51. Describe an object which is very important to you and explain why it is ofspecial value to you. Please include specific details in your explanation. v. 1
There has been drastically changed can be seen in numbers of vehicles since 1888 in England. Around 29, 000, 000 cars and other transportation facility run on the roads in the year 2000. To overcome this issue various forms of transport should be promoted to use, and some international law should be imposed to constrain ownership and usage of the car. I completely agree with a given statement. This essay will argue why this should be done to conquer this problem. Global warming is the one of the major issues, which earth is facing. Excessive usage of vehicles will stimulate this process of emitting hazardous gases like carbon dioxide in the atmosphere. It is increasing year by year, so something has to be done against it. Government should spread awareness to utilize public transportation facilities, So that less personal cars would be used. For an example, employees from the common organization or company should go to their work station together via local trains or buses. In addition to this, The rate of traffic jam would drop impressively because there are less numbers of vehicles in the way. This can be done by putting limits on using personal automobiles, and make citizens to follow international laws made for this. For an example, the government should declare that on even number of dates only the cars having even digit in the last of their car`s registration number will be allowed to use. Like every garden has weeds, similarly limiting usage of personal transport has a downside. In case of emergency, a person may not find a bus or a train to get his/her desired location. People`s life would become less flexible. A student may miss his/her exam or class because of these limitations. To conclude, there are numerous advantages of introducing laws and different transportation methods, which will help us to fight against climate change.
There has been
drastically
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changed
can be
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seen
in
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numbers
of vehicles since 1888 in England. Around 29, 000, 000
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
and other transportation facility run on the roads in the year 2000. To overcome this issue various forms of transport should
be promoted
to
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use
, and
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some
international law should
be imposed
to constrain ownership and usage of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
. I completely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
statement. This essay will argue why this should
be done
to conquer this problem.

Global warming is the one of the major issues, which earth is facing. Excessive usage of vehicles will stimulate this process of emitting hazardous gases like carbon dioxide in the atmosphere. It is increasing year by year,
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so
something
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has to
be done
against it.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
should spread awareness to utilize public transportation facilities,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
that less personal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
would be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
. For an example, employees from the common organization or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
should go to their work station together via local trains or buses.

In addition
to this, The rate of traffic jam would drop
impressively
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because
there are
Did you mean "fewer"? The noun numbers is countable.
less
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
numbers
of vehicles in the way. This can
be done
by putting limits on using personal automobiles, and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
citizens to follow international laws made for this. For an example, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should declare that on even
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of dates
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
having even digit in the last of their
The character between 'car' and 's' is an accent character, not a standard apostrophe character. Use "car’s" (curly apostrophe) or "car's" (straight apostrophe).
car`s
registration
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number
will be
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allowed
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
.

Like every garden has weeds,
similarly
limiting usage of personal transport has a downside. In case of emergency, a person may not find a bus or a train to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
his/her desired location.
The character between 'People' and 's' is an accent character, not a standard apostrophe character. Use "People’s" (curly apostrophe) or "People's" (straight apostrophe).
People`s
life would become less flexible. A student may miss his/her exam or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
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because
of these limitations.

To conclude
, there are numerous advantages of introducing laws and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
transportation methods, which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
us to fight against climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay 51. Describe an object which is very important to you and explain why it is ofspecial value to you. Please include specific details in your explanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
313 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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