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5 Aug: Many companies provide important products or services, but also damage the environment. Some people believe that the best way to stop companies from harming the environment is to require them to pay a penalty such as higher tax or a large fine when v.2

5 Aug: Many companies provide important products or services, but also damage the environment. Some people believe that the best way to stop companies from harming the environment is to require them to pay a penalty such as higher tax or a large fine when v. 2
Many environmentalists have perennially been considered the issue of environment maintenance which it has a prominent role in people’s lives. In addition, many companies are contaminating the environment with their products processes. Unlike some people may hold the viewpoint that the government should punish them by higher tax or a larger fine, I highly concur with the idea that there are some other ways to encourage them not damaging the environment. The following paragraphs will aptly elucidate my perspective through some significant arguments. To begin with, the government should encourage them to prevent releasing their sewage in the environment by decreasing tax rather than increasing. In fact, companies would find out it would be an interesting idea to enhance their profits by saving some parts of the tax money. Therefore, the more maintenance of environment, the more profits they can have. Take Irankhodro Company, one of the most popular automobile company in Iran, into consideration as an illustration. Now that this company regards severely environmental issue, it was exempted from paying any tax by the government last year. Consequently, this gift brought them saving money in the amount of approximately 1 billion dollars. Another vital point should be taken into consideration is the fact that the purifier would help companies to stop harming the environment. As long as the cost of purifier would be high and unaffordable for companies, the government must provide them some facilities to encourage them to supply their company by these instruments. For instance, Parliament of Iran has put a regulation that government should allocate some parts of budgets for this purpose. Last but not the least, the government could introduce some companies strongly following the rules of environmental conservation as the best supporter of our environment. On the other hand, they would be known as great companies by this advertising. Take McDonald to elaborate this point. Respecting to the environment, in fact, is one of the most important of features, so it has been known rapidly throughout the world. To conclude this perspective from the aforementioned points, they can be found other encouraging ways to prevent companies from releasing their sewage into environment. Not only can government reduce the amount of tax, but they can also provide them some facilities to use the purifier in their companies. Besides, the best supporter of environment would be introduced through people, which it can help them to improve their business.
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environmentalists have
perennially
been considered
the issue of
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environment
maintenance which it has a prominent role in
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people
’s
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lives
.
In addition
,
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many
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companies
are contaminating the
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environment
with their products processes. Unlike
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some
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people
may hold the viewpoint that the
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government
should punish them by higher
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tax
or a larger fine, I
highly
concur with the
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idea
that there are
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some
other ways to encourage them not damaging the
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environment
. The following paragraphs will
aptly
elucidate my perspective through
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some
significant arguments.

To
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begin
with, the
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government
should encourage them to
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prevent
releasing their sewage in the
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environment
by decreasing
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tax
rather
than increasing. In fact,
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companies
would find out it would be an interesting
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idea
to enhance their profits by saving
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some
parts of the
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tax
money.
Therefore
, the more maintenance of
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environment
, the more profits they can have. Take
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Irankhodro
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Company
, one of the most popular automobile
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company
in Iran, into consideration as an illustration.
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Now
that this
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company
regards
severely
environmental issue, it
was exempted
from paying any
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tax
by the
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government
last year.
Consequently
, this gift brought them saving money in the amount of approximately 1 billion dollars.

Another vital point should
be taken
into consideration is the fact that the purifier would
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help
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companies
to
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stop
harming the
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environment
. As long as the cost of purifier would be high and unaffordable for
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companies
, the
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government
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must
provide them
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some
facilities to encourage them to supply their
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company
by these instruments.
For instance
, Parliament of Iran has put a regulation that
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government
should allocate
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some
parts of budgets for this purpose.

Last
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but
not the least, the
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government
could introduce
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some
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companies
strongly
following the
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rules
of environmental conservation as the best supporter of our
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environment
.
On the other hand
, they would
be known
as great
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companies
by this advertising. Take McDonald to elaborate this point. Respecting to the
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environment
, in fact, is one of the most
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important
of features,
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so
it has
been known
rapidly
throughout the world.

To conclude
this perspective from the aforementioned points, they can
be found
other encouraging ways to
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prevent
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companies
from releasing their sewage into
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environment
. Not
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only
can
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government
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reduce
the amount of
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tax
,
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but
they can
also
provide them
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some
facilities to
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use
the purifier in their
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companies
.
Besides
, the best supporter of
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environment
would
be introduced
through
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people
, which it can
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help
them to
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improve
their business.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay 5 Aug: Many companies provide important products or services, but also damage the environment. Some people believe that the best way to stop companies from harming the environment is to require them to pay a penalty such as higher tax or a large fine when v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
402 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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