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27 Aug 2017: Some people believe that the media (for example: television, radio, newspapers, or Internet news sources) are less concerned nowadays with presenting accurate facts than they were in the past. These people argue that the media today often pre v.1

27 Aug 2017: Some people believe that the media (for example: television, radio, newspapers, or Internet news sources) are less concerned nowadays with presenting accurate facts than they were in the past. These people argue that the media today often pre v. 1
In the recent decades, media has a prominent role in all the societies which can help people to have a deep understanding of their communities. I highly concur with the idea that media are more attention about the accuracy news being presented throughout the society rather than they have done in the past. In the following paragraphs, I will point out some significant arguments to elaborate on this perspective. The first point that I would like to mention is the fact that people are becoming smarter by passing the time than before. Therefore, it would be more difficult that they accept some inaccurate news. Besides, if some media publish information which is not real, there are another news centers that they reveal the accurate news. To illustrate this point, Telegram is one the most important media in our country which it has approximately 40 million users. In addition, this application has news channels galore that many information comprising real and fake news are publishing every day. Statistics has been showing that the members of the fake news channels are decreasing because of finding the accurate information from other channels. According to the above mentioned, there would not be any way for some media not being scrupulous about all contains to maintain their popularities. Another aspect of this issue and perhaps the substantial one is that how people could be attracted by the quality of materials is crucial for news centers. In fact, there are abundant news publishers throughout the world. Furthermore, the only promising way to take all attention of audiences is providing precise information; otherwise, they would lose their credibility. For instance, take the BBC news into account as an illustration. Plenty of people from all over the world are being updated by BBC. Should this broadcast has not paid attention to each spreading information, it would not be able to maintain its authority. Consequently, each media wanting to extend their affection through the people should be able to absorb not only the audiences but also government supporting. Last but not least, all news broadcasting services have their own rules put by the government that they must follow them. Broadcasting incorrect information or stories enables the government to punish them, and this punishment would be detrimental to miss their credibility. Take IRIB news into consideration as an example. This news channel was famous in my country, but these days because of having some international penalties, their follower is decreasing gradually. In conclusion, the media is the most important part of people’s lives so that they would pay attention to this fact. Not only each news center would consider that people are becoming smarter but also they need to attract people to be as their audiences. Regarding the governmental rules, it would be vital to maintaining their credibility.
In the recent decades,
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media
has a prominent role in all the societies which can
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help
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people
to have a deep understanding of their communities. I
highly
concur with the
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idea
that
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media
are more
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attention
about the accuracy
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news
being presented
throughout the society
rather
than they have done in the past. In the following paragraphs, I will point out
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some
significant arguments to elaborate on this perspective.

The
first
point that I would like to mention is the fact that
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people
are becoming smarter by passing the time than
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before
.
Therefore
, it would be more difficult that they accept
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some
inaccurate
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news
.
Besides
, if
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some
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media
publish
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information
which is not real, there are another
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news
centers that they reveal the accurate
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news
. To illustrate this point, Telegram is
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one
the most
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important
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media
in our country which it has approximately 40 million users.
In addition
, this application has
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news
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channels
galore that
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many
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information
comprising real and fake
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news
are publishing every day. Statistics has been showing that the members of the fake
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news
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channels
are decreasing
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because
of finding the accurate
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information
from other
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channels
. According to the above mentioned, there would not be any way for
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some
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media
not being scrupulous about all contains to maintain their
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popularities
.

Another aspect of this issue and perhaps the substantial one is that how
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people
could
be attracted
by the quality of materials is crucial for
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news
centers. In fact, there are abundant
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news
publishers throughout the world.
Furthermore
, the
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only
promising way to take all
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attention
of audiences is providing precise
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information
;
otherwise
, they would lose their credibility.
For instance
, take the BBC
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news
into account as an illustration.
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Plenty
of
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people
from all over the world are
being updated
by BBC. Should this broadcast has not paid
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attention
to each spreading
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information
, it would not be able to maintain its authority.
Consequently
, each
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media
wanting to extend their affection through the
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people
should be able to absorb not
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only
the audiences
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but
also
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government
supporting.

Last
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not least, all
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broadcasting services have their
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own
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rules
put by the
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government
that they
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must
follow them. Broadcasting incorrect
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information
or stories enables the
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government
to punish them, and this punishment would be detrimental to miss their credibility. Take
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IRIB
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into consideration as an example. This
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news
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channel
was
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famous
in my country,
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these days
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of having
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international penalties, their follower is decreasing
gradually
.

In conclusion
, the
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media
is the most
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important
part of
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people’s
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lives
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so
that they would pay
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attention
to this fact. Not
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only
each
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center would consider that
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people
are becoming smarter
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but
also
they need to attract
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people
to be as their audiences. Regarding the governmental
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rules
, it would be vital to maintaining their credibility.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay 27 Aug 2017: Some people believe that the media (for example: television, radio, newspapers, or Internet news sources) are less concerned nowadays with presenting accurate facts than they were in the past. These people argue that the media today often pre v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
468 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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