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5 Aug: Many companies provide important products or services, but also damage the environment. Some people believe that the best way to stop companies from harming the environment is to require them to pay a penalty such as higher tax or a large fine when v.1

5 Aug: Many companies provide important products or services, but also damage the environment. Some people believe that the best way to stop companies from harming the environment is to require them to pay a penalty such as higher tax or a large fine when v. 1
CERTAIN PEOPLE ARGUE THAT FEMALE AND MALE SHOULD HAVE DIVERT INSTITUTE FOR THEIR EDUCATION DUE TO VARIOUS BELIEFS, WHEREAS REST OF THE FOLKS OPPOSE THE IDEA AND SAYS THAT IT IS BENEFICIAL FOR GENDERS TO OBATIN A KNOWLEDGE FROM SAME ACADEMY. FIRSTLY, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THE PRIME BELIEF OF PEOPLE BEHIND ADMITING THEIR BOYS AND GIRLS IN THE DIVERT SCHOOL AND SECONDLY, THE ADVATAGES OF PROVIDING TEACHING TO THE BOYS AND GIRLS TOGATHER. LASTLY, STATE THE OPINION IN THE FAVOUR OF THE PUTTING THEM IN ONE SCHOOL. ON THE ON HAND, THERE IS AN ANCIENT BELIEF THAT IF GIRLS OBTAIN KNOWLEDGE IN A SEPARATE ACADEMY THEN SHE WILL GET MORE SUCCESS AND COULD ABLE TO EXPRESS THE INTEREST FREELY. CONSEQUENTLY, THERE ARE NO BOYS IN THE INSTITUTE TO MAKE THEM FEEL COMPLEX. AS ARESULT, THEY COULD BE THE MOST QUALIFIED FEMALE WHO CAN COMPETE WITH MEN FULLY. FOR EXAMPLE, THE INDIAN ANA ANCIENT DATA REVEALED THAT 80% THE WOMEN SUCCSSEED IN PROFESSIONALLY DUE TO FREEDOM IN DURING ATTENDING INSTITUTION. ON THE OTHER HAND, WHEN BOTH BOYS AND GIRLS ARE IJ THE SAME SCHOOL WITHOUT ANY DISTINGUTION, THEN THEY HAVE TOUGH COMPETITION IN THE ACADEMIC FIELD AS BOTH THE GENDER TEND TO HAVE THE SAME BRAIN CAPACITY TO STORE THE INDFORMARION. NONETHELESS, IT IS DEPEND ON THE USAGE OF BRAIN AND WHERE THEY USE. FOR INSTANCE, TODAY'S 80% OF THE DOCTORS ARE THE FEMALE BECAIUSE THEY HAVE MORE BRAIN FUNCTION AND HAVE PATIENT TO ACHIEVE HIGH QUALIFICATION. NEVERTHELESS, BOYS SEEMS TO HAVE URGE TO EARN MONEY WITHIOUT ANY EFFORT AND THIS MAKE THEM ENDING UP WITH LOW INCOME. FROM MY POINT OF VIEW, IF WE STOP DISTINGUSING BETWEEN MEN AND WOMEN BY MAKING THE ACADEMY OFFICIAL FOR BOTH THE GENDER THAN SURELY, THE GIRLS COULD BRING A FAME FOR THEM, THEIR FAMILY AND FOR THE NATION AS WELL. IN CONCLUSION. BOTH THE KIND OF PEOPLE INDEED RIGHT ON THEIR PLACE ACCORING THE THE SITUATION AT THAT TIME. DISPITE, TODAY'S WORLD IS MORE FORWARD AND OPENED MINDED THAN INDIVIDUAL SHOULD NOT MAKE A DIFFERENCE IN BETWEEN. THIS WOULD BE SUCCESSEED WITH THE SUPORT OF THE GOVERNMENT AND INDIVIDUAL AWARENESS.
CERTAIN
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PEOPLE
ARGUE THAT FEMALE AND MALE SHOULD HAVE
Use past participle here: "diverted".
DIVERT
INSTITUTE FOR THEIR EDUCATION DUE TO VARIOUS BELIEFS, WHEREAS REST OF THE FOLKS OPPOSE THE
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IDEA
AND SAYS THAT IT IS BENEFICIAL FOR GENDERS TO
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OBATIN
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A KNOWLEDGE
FROM SAME ACADEMY.
FIRSTLY
, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THE PRIME BELIEF OF
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PEOPLE
BEHIND
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ADMITING
THEIR
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BOYS
AND
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GIRLS
IN
After 'THE', do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of 'DIVERT' is correct. If 'DIVERT' is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
THE DIVERT
SCHOOL AND
SECONDLY
, THE
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ADVATAGES
OF PROVIDING TEACHING TO THE
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BOYS
AND
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GIRLS
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TOGATHER
.
LASTLY
, STATE THE OPINION IN THE
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FAVOUR
OF THE PUTTING THEM IN ONE SCHOOL.

ON THE ON HAND, THERE IS AN ANCIENT BELIEF THAT IF
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GIRLS
OBTAIN KNOWLEDGE IN A SEPARATE ACADEMY THEN SHE WILL
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GET
MORE SUCCESS AND COULD ABLE TO EXPRESS THE INTEREST
FREELY
.
CONSEQUENTLY
, THERE ARE NO
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BOYS
IN THE INSTITUTE TO
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MAKE
THEM FEEL COMPLEX. AS
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ARESULT
, THEY COULD BE THE MOST QUALIFIED FEMALE WHO CAN COMPETE WITH
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MEN
FULLY
.
FOR EXAMPLE
, THE INDIAN ANA ANCIENT DATA REVEALED THAT 80% THE WOMEN
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SUCCSSEED
IN
PROFESSIONALLY
DUE TO FREEDOM IN DURING ATTENDING INSTITUTION.

ON THE OTHER HAND
, WHEN BOTH
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BOYS
AND
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GIRLS
ARE IJ THE SAME SCHOOL WITHOUT ANY
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DISTINGUTION
, THEN THEY HAVE TOUGH COMPETITION IN THE ACADEMIC FIELD AS BOTH THE GENDER TEND TO HAVE THE SAME BRAIN CAPACITY TO STORE THE
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INDFORMARION
. NONETHELESS, IT IS
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DEPEND
ON THE USAGE OF BRAIN AND WHERE THEY
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USE
.
FOR INSTANCE
,
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TODAY
'S 80% OF THE DOCTORS ARE THE FEMALE
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BECAIUSE
THEY HAVE MORE BRAIN FUNCTION AND HAVE PATIENT TO ACHIEVE HIGH QUALIFICATION.
NEVERTHELESS
,
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BOYS
SEEMS TO HAVE URGE TO EARN MONEY
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WITHIOUT
ANY EFFORT AND THIS
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MAKE
THEM ENDING UP WITH LOW INCOME.

FROM MY POINT OF VIEW, IF WE
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STOP
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DISTINGUSING
BETWEEN
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MEN
AND WOMEN BY MAKING THE ACADEMY OFFICIAL FOR BOTH THE GENDER THAN
SURELY
, THE
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GIRLS
COULD BRING A FAME FOR THEM, THEIR FAMILY AND FOR THE NATION
AS WELL
.

IN CONCLUSION
. BOTH THE KIND OF
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PEOPLE
INDEED
RIGHT ON THEIR PLACE
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ACCORING
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THE THE
SITUATION AT THAT TIME.
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DISPITE
,
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TODAY
'S WORLD IS MORE FORWARD AND OPENED MINDED THAN INDIVIDUAL SHOULD NOT
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MAKE
A DIFFERENCE IN BETWEEN. THIS WOULD BE
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SUCCESSEED
WITH THE
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SUPORT
OF THE
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GOVERNMENT
AND INDIVIDUAL AWARENESS.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay 5 Aug: Many companies provide important products or services, but also damage the environment. Some people believe that the best way to stop companies from harming the environment is to require them to pay a penalty such as higher tax or a large fine when v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
358 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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