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What are some of the Pros and Cons of extreme/adventure sports? Support your point of view with reasons and examples from your own experience. v.2

What are some of the Pros and Cons of extreme/adventure sports? Support your point of view with reasons and examples from your own experience. v. 2
Nowadays, adventure sports become a considerable debate among public all around the world. Although the extreme sports activities are regarded as thoroughly pastime and morale constructive by a considerable number of people, there are a number of people holds an opposing view. For the purpose of this essay, I would discuss both positive and negative viewpoints. To begin with, there are various reasons to support or disapproval adventure sports. On the one hand, in the logical opinion, many of these actions such as parachuting, paragliding and banjo jumping are hazardous. But for some people they are funny. For example, when I do Kite surfing in every weekend, I have a delighting and peaceful sense. On the other hand, in against to the fun, some of these exciting sports are very dangerous. For instance, there is a high possibility of heart attack for those who do Banjo jumping. also, a recent scientific research conducted with Tehran University researchers shows that there are many accidents for climbers like falling off or missing in snow mountains that happened every year in all around the world. In conclusion, there are several compelling arguments on both sides; my personal sentiment is that despite excitement some of the extreme sports are very hazardous.
Nowadays, adventure
sports
become a considerable debate among public all around the world. Although the extreme
sports
activities
are regarded
as
thoroughly
pastime and morale constructive by a considerable number of
people
, there are a number of
people
holds an opposing view. For the purpose of this essay, I would discuss both
positive
and
negative
viewpoints.

To
begin
with, there are various reasons to support or disapproval adventure
sports
. On the one hand, in the logical opinion,
many
of these actions such as parachuting, paragliding and banjo jumping are hazardous.
But
for
some
people
they are
funny
.
For example
, when I do Kite surfing in every weekend, I have a delighting and peaceful sense.

On the other hand
, in against to the fun,
some
of these exciting
sports
are
very
dangerous
.
For instance
, there is a high possibility of heart attack for those who do Banjo jumping.
also
,
a recent scientific research
conducted with Tehran University researchers
shows
that there are
many
accidents for climbers like falling off or missing in snow mountains that happened every year in all around the world.

In conclusion
, there are several compelling arguments on both sides; my personal sentiment is that despite excitement
some of the
extreme
sports
are
very
hazardous.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay What are some of the Pros and Cons of extreme/adventure sports? Support your point of view with reasons and examples from your own experience. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
207 words
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