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important qualities of a good son or daughter? have these qualities changes or remained same over time in your culture. . v.1

important qualities of a good son or daughter? have these qualities changes or remained same over time in your culture. . v. 1
Medical practitioners in all countries of the world have established the fact that eating junks are bad for the health of citizens. Despite this, there is an increasing number of people eating fast food. One of the first problems is because home-made meals take a lot of time to prepare. The process of preparation is quite long, from going to the supermarket to prepping for the meals when they get home, while still thinking about putting the children to sleep or getting up for work early next day. Take, for instance, a couple that both work 9-5 and have three children, they may simply prefer to buy pizza for dinner on their way back from work instead of getting home at 7pm to cook. Another problem is the fact that unhealthy foods like burgers and fries are cheaper to buy than regular healthy meals like grains, fruits and vegetables. For example, one can get a burger in McDonalds at $5. 99 while salads cost over $10. There are two effective ways to savage the problem. Fast food restaurants should incorporate healthy meals in their menu at cheaper rates, this will in turn encourage people to substitute some of the junk foods with healthy meals. Take, for example, doughnut stores can add a salad or beneficial smoothies to their menu. In addition to that, parents should consistently educate their children and wards on the effects and repercussion of eating junks. Children learn and digest a lot of information from what they see, so parents should ensure they are good examples of what they preach. For example, parents should follow suit and invest in healthy meals. They can reward good behaviour with healthy smoothies instead of ice cream or snacks. lastly, junk food consumption can be reduced to the barest minimum if the government, policy makers and society at large sees it as a problem that needs to be addressed with immediate effect. This will give the everyone a better perspective on the effects of eating unhealthy meals.
Medical practitioners in all countries of the world have established the fact that
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junks
are
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bad
for the health of citizens. Despite this, there is an increasing number of
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people
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eating
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fast
food.

One of the
first
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problems
is
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because
home-made
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meals
take
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a lot of
time to prepare. The process of preparation is quite long, from going to the supermarket to prepping for the
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meals
when they
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get
home, while
still
thinking about putting the
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children
to sleep or getting up for work early
next
day. Take,
for instance
, a couple that both work 9-5 and have three
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children
, they may
simply
prefer to
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buy
pizza for dinner on their way back from work
instead
of getting home at 7pm to cook. Another
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problem
is the fact that unhealthy
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foods
like burgers and fries are cheaper to
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buy
than regular
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healthy
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meals
like grains, fruits and vegetables. For
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example
, one can
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get
a burger in
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McDonalds
at $5. 99 while salads cost over $10.

There are two effective ways to savage the
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problem
.
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Fast
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food
restaurants should incorporate
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healthy
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meals
in their menu at cheaper rates, this will in turn encourage
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people
to substitute
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some of the
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junk
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foods
with
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healthy
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meals
. Take, for
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example
, doughnut stores can
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add
a salad or beneficial smoothies to their menu.
In addition
to that, parents should
consistently
educate their
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children
and wards on the effects and repercussion of
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eating
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junks
.
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Children
learn and digest
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a lot of
information from what they
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see
,
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so
parents should ensure they are
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good
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examples
of what they preach. For
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example
, parents should follow suit and invest in
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healthy
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meals
. They can reward
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good
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behaviour
with
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healthy
smoothies
instead
of ice cream or snacks.

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lastly
,
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junk
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food
consumption can be
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reduced
to the barest minimum if the
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government
,
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policy makers
and society at large
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sees
it as a
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problem
that needs to
be addressed
with immediate effect. This will give
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the everyone
a better perspective on the effects of
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eating
unhealthy
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meals
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
I am always sorry when any language is lost, because languages are the pedigrees of nations.
Samuel Johnson

IELTS essay important qualities of a good son or daughter? have these qualities changes or remained same over time in your culture. . v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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