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46. Everyone has to leave home sometimes. What do you miss most when youare away from home? Please include specific examples and details in yourexplanation. v.1

46. Everyone has to leave home sometimes. What do you miss most when youare away from home? Please include specific examples and details in yourexplanation. v. 1
MORE AND MORE PEOPLE ARE NOWADYS CHOOSE TO TRAVEL ABROAD FOR ANY REASON LIKE WORK AOR STUDY OR IMMIGRATION PURSPOSES. AND THIS INTEREST HAS MADE ENGLISH THE WIDELY SPOKEN LANGUAGE ALL OVER THE WORLD. DUE TO THIS, SOME OF THE INDIVIDUALS BELIEVE THAT ENGLISH WOULD BE THE ONE LANGUAGE PEOPLE SPEEKS IN THE NEAR FUTURE. SO THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS BOTH THE SIDE AND STATE THAT THERE MORE PROS THAN CONS. TO START WITH PLETHORA OF MERITS OF HAVING ONLY ONE SPOKEN LANGUAG. FIRSTLY, IT HELP TO BUID STRING ECONOMY AS PEOPLE MAY ABLE TO COMMUNICATE FREELY WITH OTHER FOREIGNERS AND HAVE A CHANCE OF KNOWING EACHOTHER CULTURE MORE IN THE DEPTH WITHOUT ANY HASITATION OR DOUBT. THIS LEADS TO BOOST TO NUMBER OF OVERSEAS TARVELLER AND CONTRUBUTE IN RISING THH ECONOMY OF THE TERETORY. SECONDLY. EVERYONE BE AS EQUAL OTHERS AND THUS THEY WILL NOT FACE ANY DISCRIMINATION PROBLEMS LIKE RECISM, AND PEOPLE COME CLOSE TO GATHER MORE. THERE WILL BE MORE KINDNESS FOR EACHOTHER. TAKE LONDON AS AN EXAMPLE, WHERE 90% OF PEOPLE SPEAKS ENGLISH AS THEIR FIRST LANGUAGE. SO THE STUDENT OR ANY HIGHLY QUALIFIED PEOPLE EASYLY OBTAIN A VISA TO MIGRATE AND INCREASE THE ECONOMY. IN THE TERMDS OF DEMERITS, AS FACR AS I CAN SEE, THE MAIN CONS IS THAT ITR MAKES CUSTOM VALUE LESS RESPECTED AND AT SOME POINT MAY BECOME EXTINCT. TO ELABOATE, WHEN ON START SPEAKING ONLY ONE LANGUAGE THEN THE OUR OLDERS ARE UNABLOE TO SHARE THE VALUES WITH THEIR DESCENDANTS AND FROM THEIR IT START VANISHING PROCESS OF THE OUR MAOTHER LONGUAGE. TAKE INDIA AS AN INSTANCE, 90% OF CHILDRENS ARE STUDING IN THE INSTITUTION WHERE THE ENGLISH CONSIDER AS A FISRT LANGUAGE. THUS THAT OFFSPRINGS ARE NOT CAPABLE TO COMMUNICATE WITH THEIR GRAND PARENTS OR ILLITERATE'S PARENTS. AS RESULT EXTINCTION OF THE FIRST LANGUAGE. TO SUM UP, AFTER SEEING THE THODAY'S WORLD REQUIREMET. I CAN FEEL IF ENGLISH BECOME A PRIME SPOKEN LANGUAGE THAN EVERYONE WILL BE BENEFIACILA AND THEIT WILL BE NO RECISM EXIST. TO DECREASE THE NEGETIVE EFFECT, GOVERNMENT CAN IMPLIMENT A COMMON RULE WHERE IT STATE THAT IT IS COMPULSARY TO LEARN THEIR MOTHER LANGUAGE AS WELL.
MORE AND MORE
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PEOPLE
ARE
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NOWADYS
CHOOSE TO TRAVEL ABROAD FOR ANY REASON LIKE WORK AOR STUDY OR IMMIGRATION
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PURSPOSES
. AND THIS INTEREST HAS MADE ENGLISH THE
WIDELY
SPOKEN
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LANGUAGE
ALL OVER THE WORLD. DUE TO THIS,
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SOME OF THE
INDIVIDUALS BELIEVE THAT ENGLISH WOULD BE THE ONE
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LANGUAGE
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PEOPLE SPEEKS
IN THE NEAR FUTURE.
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SO
THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS BOTH THE SIDE AND STATE THAT THERE MORE PROS THAN CONS.

TO
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START
WITH PLETHORA OF MERITS OF HAVING
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ONLY
ONE SPOKEN
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LANGUAG
.
FIRSTLY
, IT
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HELP
TO
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BUID
STRING ECONOMY AS
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PEOPLE
MAY ABLE TO COMMUNICATE
FREELY
WITH OTHER FOREIGNERS AND HAVE A CHANCE OF KNOWING
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EACHOTHER
CULTURE MORE IN THE DEPTH WITHOUT ANY
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HASITATION
OR DOUBT. THIS LEADS TO BOOST TO NUMBER OF OVERSEAS
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TARVELLER
AND
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CONTRUBUTE
IN RISING
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THH
ECONOMY OF THE
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TERETORY
.
SECONDLY
. EVERYONE
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BE
AS EQUAL OTHERS AND
THUS
THEY WILL NOT FACE ANY DISCRIMINATION PROBLEMS LIKE
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RECISM
, AND
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PEOPLE
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COME
CLOSE TO GATHER MORE. THERE WILL BE MORE KINDNESS FOR
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EACHOTHER
. TAKE LONDON AS AN EXAMPLE, WHERE 90% OF
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PEOPLE
SPEAKS ENGLISH AS THEIR
FIRST
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LANGUAGE
.
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SO
THE STUDENT OR ANY
HIGHLY
QUALIFIED
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PEOPLE
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EASYLY
OBTAIN A VISA TO MIGRATE AND INCREASE THE ECONOMY.

IN THE
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TERMDS
OF DEMERITS, AS
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FACR
AS I CAN
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SEE
, THE MAIN CONS IS THAT
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ITR
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MAKES
CUSTOM VALUE LESS RESPECTED AND AT
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SOME
POINT MAY BECOME EXTINCT. TO
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ELABOATE
, WHEN ON
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START
SPEAKING
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ONLY
ONE
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LANGUAGE
THEN
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THE OUR OLDERS
ARE
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UNABLOE
TO SHARE THE VALUES WITH THEIR DESCENDANTS AND FROM THEIR IT
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START
VANISHING PROCESS OF
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THE OUR MAOTHER
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LONGUAGE
. TAKE INDIA AS AN INSTANCE, 90% OF
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CHILDRENS
ARE
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STUDING
IN THE INSTITUTION WHERE THE ENGLISH CONSIDER AS A
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FISRT
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LANGUAGE
.
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THUS
THAT
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OFFSPRINGS
ARE NOT CAPABLE TO COMMUNICATE WITH THEIR GRAND PARENTS OR ILLITERATE'S PARENTS. AS RESULT EXTINCTION OF THE
FIRST
LANGUAGE.

TO SUM UP, AFTER SEEING THE
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THODAY
'S WORLD
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REQUIREMET
. I CAN FEEL IF ENGLISH BECOME A PRIME SPOKEN
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LANGUAGE
THAN EVERYONE WILL BE
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BENEFIACILA
AND
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THEIT
WILL BE NO
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RECISM
EXIST. TO DECREASE THE
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NEGETIVE
EFFECT,
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GOVERNMENT
CAN
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IMPLIMENT
A COMMON
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RULE
WHERE IT STATE THAT IT IS
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COMPULSARY
TO LEARN THEIR MOTHER
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LANGUAGE
AS WELL
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
A new language is a new life.
Persian Proverb

IELTS essay 46. Everyone has to leave home sometimes. What do you miss most when youare away from home? Please include specific examples and details in yourexplanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
361 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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