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3)Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

3) Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
TODAY'S WORLD HAS BECOMING MORE COMPETATIVE HENCE, OFFSPRINGS REQUIRED A MORE ATTENTION FROM THEIR SURROUNDING. CERTAIN FOLKS ARGUE THAT OFFSPRINGS SHOULD BE TAUGHT AT HOME BY THEIR PARENT OR GURDIAN WHERE AS REST OF THE INDIVIDUAL PREFERED TO SEND THEIR JUVENILE TO THE SCHOOL DUE TO THE VARIOUS REASONS. FIRSTLY, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS HOW THE HOME STUDY PROVIDE THEM A COMFORTABLE AND STRESS FREE TEACHING AND SECONDOLY HOW LEARING AT ACADEMY BUILD A BASIC HUNOUR AND MANNERS. LASTLY, STATE THE OPINION IN THE FAVOR BOTH THE IDEAD AS PER THE REQUIREMENT. ON THE ONE HAND, HOME LEARNING CONSIDERED AS A CONVIENT WAY TO MAKE THE CHILDREN UNDERSTAND ABOUT NEW THINGS AS THEY CAN UNDERSTAND EASILY WITHOUT BEING AFRAID OF ANYONE. FOR EXAMPLE, THE TODLLERS INTELLEGENT TEST IN TGHE INDIA SHOWN THAT OFFSPRINGS WHO LEARN AT HOME HAVE MORE IQ POWER THAN SCHOOL. HENCE, IT IS BENEFICIAL TO TEACH CHILDREN AT DWELLING THANN TO SEND THEM SCHOO. ON THE OTHER HAND, SCHOOL PROVIDE A GROUP LEARNIG WHICH IS NECESSARY TO SURVIVE IN THIS COMPETATIVE WORLD BY GIVING THEM LESSION UPON HOW TO BEHAVE IN A GOOD MANNERS AND WHY SHARING IS CARING AND SO ON. AS A RESULT, PUPIL NEVER GET NERVOUS WHEN COME OUT IN THE REAL COSMOS. FOR INSTANCE, 80 OF THE UKSCHOOL SURVEY REVEALED THAT 90% OF THE HIDDEN TALENT OF THE JUVENILES RECOGNISED AFTER THEY TOOK PART IN THE VARIOUS SPORT OR CURLINARY ACTIVITIES. IN MY POINT OF VIEWS, THERE SHOULD BE SOME CONFIRMED AGE WHICH STATE THAT THE SPECIFIC AGE IS THE PERFECT FOR CHILD LEARNING AT VARIOUS STAGES OF LIFE. IN CONCLUSION, BOTH THE PLACES INDEED PROVIDE IMPORTANT LESSION THAT IS MUCH NEEDED IN THE JUVENILE'S LIFE. HENCE, I THINK BOTH HAS AN EQUAL RESPONSIBILITY TO MAKE OUR TODAY'S CHILD AS A PERFECT YOUTH FURTHER.
TODAY
'S WORLD HAS BECOMING MORE
COMPETATIVE
HENCE
,
OFFSPRINGS
REQUIRED A MORE ATTENTION FROM THEIR SURROUNDING. CERTAIN FOLKS ARGUE THAT
OFFSPRINGS
SHOULD
BE TAUGHT
AT HOME BY THEIR PARENT OR
GURDIAN
WHERE AS
REST OF THE INDIVIDUAL
PREFERED
TO
SEND
THEIR JUVENILE TO THE SCHOOL DUE TO THE VARIOUS REASONS.
FIRSTLY
, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS HOW THE HOME STUDY PROVIDE THEM A COMFORTABLE AND
STRESS
FREE TEACHING AND
SECONDOLY
HOW
LEARING
AT ACADEMY BUILD A BASIC
HUNOUR
AND MANNERS.
LASTLY
, STATE THE OPINION IN THE FAVOR BOTH THE
IDEAD
AS PER THE REQUIREMENT.

ON THE ONE HAND, HOME LEARNING CONSIDERED AS A
CONVIENT
WAY TO
MAKE
THE CHILDREN UNDERSTAND ABOUT NEW THINGS AS THEY CAN UNDERSTAND
EASILY
WITHOUT BEING AFRAID OF ANYONE.
FOR EXAMPLE
, THE
TODLLERS
INTELLEGENT
TEST
IN
TGHE
INDIA SHOWN THAT
OFFSPRINGS
WHO LEARN AT HOME HAVE MORE IQ POWER THAN SCHOOL.
HENCE
, IT IS BENEFICIAL TO TEACH CHILDREN AT DWELLING
THANN
TO
SEND
THEM
SCHOO
.

ON THE OTHER HAND
, SCHOOL PROVIDE A GROUP
LEARNIG
WHICH IS NECESSARY TO SURVIVE IN THIS
COMPETATIVE
WORLD BY GIVING THEM
LESSION
UPON HOW TO BEHAVE IN A
GOOD
MANNERS AND WHY SHARING IS CARING AND
SO
ON.
AS A RESULT
, PUPIL NEVER
GET
NERVOUS WHEN
COME
OUT IN THE REAL COSMOS.
FOR INSTANCE
, 80 OF THE
UKSCHOOL
SURVEY REVEALED THAT 90% OF THE HIDDEN TALENT OF THE JUVENILES
RECOGNISED
AFTER THEY
TOOK PART
IN THE VARIOUS SPORT OR
CURLINARY
ACTIVITIES.

IN MY POINT OF VIEWS, THERE SHOULD BE
SOME
CONFIRMED AGE WHICH STATE THAT THE SPECIFIC AGE IS THE PERFECT FOR CHILD LEARNING AT VARIOUS STAGES OF LIFE.

IN CONCLUSION
, BOTH THE PLACES
INDEED
PROVIDE
IMPORTANT
LESSION
THAT IS
MUCH NEEDED IN THE JUVENILE'S LIFE.
HENCE
, I
THINK
BOTH HAS AN EQUAL RESPONSIBILITY TO
MAKE
OUR
TODAY
'S CHILD AS A PERFECT YOUTH
FURTHER
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay 3) Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
301 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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