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Question: Some students prefer classes with open discussions between the professor and students and almost no lectures. Other students prefer classes with lectures and almost no discussions. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to suppor v.1

Question: Some students prefer classes with open discussions between the professor and students and almost no lectures. Other students prefer classes with lectures and almost no discussions. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to suppor v. 1
These days, proves of global warming and climate change have been exposed by scientific researchers and means of communication. Governments are believed by some to be unable to take action, and individuals have to protect the nature by changing their behaviours. Personally, I disagree with this view, and in my opinion, both of them should join hands together in order to tackle this issue. To begin with, in terms of the governments, there is a wide range of measures that they can take in search of the best solutions. Firstly, since the government has the power to control a whole country, it is necessary to publish strict rules and punishments towards bad deeds which directly damage the environment. For instance, those who litter the street, cause deforestation or kill animals have to be punished severely. The second action would be to encourage residents to go cycling or use public transportation on a regular basis, such as buses or taxis. In doing so, the proportion of harmful chemicals and carbon dioxide emitted from automobiles and motorbikes can be significantly decreased. Finally, in order to raise inhabitants' awareness, governments may also organise movements and campaigns so that young generation, including students and children, can be conscious and take more notice of the environment. On an individual level, they should have a good grasp of environmental damage prevention. In fact, they have to abide by and execute seriously the regulations of the government. In addition, they should also reduce plastic consumption by using more eco-friendly and biodegradable products. To illustrate, plastic bags can be replaced by silk bags and iron boxes to carry food when travelling to a place. Besides, instead of fossil fuel, such as coal and oil, citizens can indeed use inexhaustible energy in their daily life, like wind, solar power or waves. In conclusion, I strongly believe that both governments and residents should combine and co-operate together so that they can succeed in limiting climate change, as well as getting access to better environmental protection.
These days, proves of global warming and climate
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change
have
been exposed
by scientific researchers and means of communication.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Governments
are believed
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
to be unable to take action, and individuals
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
protect the nature by changing their
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviours' is British English.
behaviours
.
Personally
, I disagree with this view, and in my opinion, both of them should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
hands together in order to tackle this issue.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, in terms of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
, there is a wide range of measures that they can take in search of the best solutions.
Firstly
, since the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
has the power to control a whole country, it is necessary to publish strict
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and punishments towards
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
deeds which
directly
damage the environment.
For instance
, those who litter the street, cause deforestation or kill animals
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
be punished
severely
. The second action would be to encourage residents to go cycling or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
public transportation on a regular basis, such as buses or taxis. In doing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
, the proportion of harmful chemicals and carbon dioxide emitted from automobiles and motorbikes can be
significantly
decreased.
Finally
, in order to raise inhabitants' awareness,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
may
also
Possible spelling mistake. 'organise' is British English.
organise
movements and campaigns
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that young generation, including students and children, can be conscious and take more notice of the environment.

On an individual level, they should have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
grasp of environmental damage prevention. In fact, they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
abide by and execute
seriously
the regulations of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
.
In addition
, they should
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
plastic consumption by using more eco-friendly and biodegradable products. To illustrate, plastic bags can
be replaced
by silk bags and iron boxes to carry food when travelling to a place.
Besides
,
instead
of fossil fuel, such as coal and oil, citizens can
indeed
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
inexhaustible energy in their daily life, like wind, solar power or waves.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
believe that both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
and residents should combine and co-operate together
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they can succeed in limiting climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
,
as well
as getting access to better environmental protection.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Question: Some students prefer classes with open discussions between the professor and students and almost no lectures. Other students prefer classes with lectures and almost no discussions. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to suppor v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
335 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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