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3. In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experienc v.1

3. In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? 1
The aged people want to live in a residential home. In Britain, where nurses can take care of them, but the authority has to pay for this. Some people believe that the family should pay for the care of nursing homes. In my opinion, the government plays a vital rule in providing seniors with a suitable cure and a cost for elderly homes. Accordingly, the economic conditions and massive taxes. First and foremost, the economic situation, nowadays, is restrained people for funding the medicines and senior homes because of economic recession. However, the authority is a burden of putting money as penalties after retirement. For example, Egypt in 1985 made a rule for antiquated people, that they are financed for their requirements and houses where nurses are responsible for helping. Although the jurisdiction made a law for preserving the older people's rights, the aged people didn't put their concentration on their health. Second, massive taxes are constrained by the financial power of workers. As a result, the state has taken an amount of money as taxes to fund elderly homes such as people who are more than 65 years with all facilities. For instance, The USA in 1993 made jumped taxes on the employee that it was difficult to effort, but the workers after retirement they have been taking penalties for lifelong. Furthermore, they have lived comfortably in houses which are established for preserving the health of them and nurses who are responsible for giving them a cure and communicating to avoid aged people from isolation. In conclusion, the circumstances these days make it harder for people to finance old people and epic taxes. Even though the development related to seniors happens this century, aged citizens still suffering. I agree with authority has a central role in providing old people their needs.
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believe that the family should pay for the care of nursing
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. In my opinion, the
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government
plays a vital
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rule
in providing seniors with a suitable cure and a cost for elderly
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homes
.
Accordingly
, the economic conditions and massive taxes.

First
and foremost, the economic situation, nowadays,
is restrained
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people
for funding the medicines and senior
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homes
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because
of economic recession.
However
, the authority is a burden of putting money as penalties after retirement.
For example
, Egypt in 1985 made a
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rule
for antiquated
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people
, that they
are financed
for their requirements and
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houses
where nurses are responsible for helping. Although the jurisdiction made a law for preserving the older
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people
's rights, the
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aged
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people
didn't put their concentration on their health.

Second, massive
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taxes
are constrained
by the financial power of workers.
As a result
, the state has taken an amount of money as
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taxes
to fund elderly
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homes
such as
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people
who are more than 65 years with all facilities.
For instance
, The USA in 1993 made jumped
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taxes
on the employee that it was difficult to effort,
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but
the workers after retirement they have been taking penalties for lifelong.
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, they have
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lived
comfortably
in
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houses
which
are established
for preserving the health of them and nurses who are responsible for giving them a cure and communicating to avoid
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aged
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people
from isolation.

In conclusion
, the circumstances these days
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make
it harder for
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people
to finance
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old
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people
and epic
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taxes
.
Even though
the development related to seniors happens this century,
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aged
citizens
still
suffering. I
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agree
with authority has a central role in providing
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old
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people
their needs.
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IELTS essay 3. In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? 1

Essay
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4 paragraphs
302 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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