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#2Some people like to study in public places where there are other people around. Others prefer to study in places where there are few or no people around. Which kindof place do you prefer? Explain why. v.1

#2Some people like to study in public places where there are other people around. Others prefer to study in places where there are few or no people around. Which kindof place do you prefer? Explain why. v. 1
These days, whether an increase in information provided by the Internet is beneficial for humankind or not has sparked a heated debate. Although such issue is contested by many, it is regarded thoroughly both constructive and positive by a substantial number of individuals. As such, there are both merits and demerits to this trend, but I am of the opinion that the former outdo the latter. Firstly, the Internet plays an important role in education. Particularly, the Internet helps people to access more articles and journals in a faster way. For example, in the past, most students need to spend long hours in the library to research, find a book and collect the information that they want for their essay. In contrast, in modern days, students can stay home and find all the information that they want in a faster way by using the Internet. Moreover, the Internet provides various ways for people to learn new skills and knowledge. In detailed, these days, it is not necessary for people to go to university to obtain new knowledge. For instance, people who are busy with working can still study online to achieve higher qualification such as MBA degree for their further career. Secondly, the Internet is a key factor in spreading the information and connecting the world. Specifically, due to far geographical distance, people are unable to attend in important events such as World Cup or Sea Games. However, with the advent of the Internet, people can watch it by using online streaming. Similarly, with international corporations such as Hilton, Accor, it is common for them to have an international meeting. In this case, the Internet help people to organise the meeting online without travelling to one particular location. In conclusion, the benefits of the Internet are too great to ignore. Internet is an important tool not only in education but also in communication.
These days, whether an increase in
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information
provided by the Internet is beneficial for humankind or not has sparked a heated debate. Although such issue
is contested
by
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many
, it
is regarded
thoroughly
both constructive and
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positive
by a substantial number of individuals. As such, there are both merits and demerits to this trend,
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but
I am of the opinion that the former outdo the latter.

Firstly
, the Internet plays an
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important
role in education.
Particularly
, the Internet
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helps
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people
to access more articles and journals in a faster way.
For example
, in the past, most students need to spend long hours in the library to research, find a book and collect the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
that they want for their essay.
In contrast
, in modern days, students can stay home and find all the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
that they want in a faster way by using the Internet.
Moreover
, the Internet provides various ways for
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people
to learn new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and knowledge. In detailed, these days, it is not necessary for
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people
to go to university to obtain new knowledge.
For instance
,
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people
who are busy with working can
still
study online to achieve higher qualification such as MBA degree for their
further
career.

Secondly
, the Internet is a key factor in spreading the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
and connecting the world.
Specifically
, due to far geographical distance,
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people
are unable to attend in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
such as World Cup or Sea Games.
However
, with the advent of the Internet,
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people
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
it by using online streaming.
Similarly
, with international corporations such as Hilton, Accor, it is common for them to have an international meeting.
In this case
, the Internet
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
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people
to
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organise
the meeting online without travelling to one particular location.

In conclusion
, the benefits of the Internet are too great to
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ignore
. Internet is an
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important
tool not
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only
in education
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but
also
in communication.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay #2Some people like to study in public places where there are other people around. Others prefer to study in places where there are few or no people around. Which kindof place do you prefer? Explain why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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