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29. 09. 2017 you ordered a new cheque book from your bank two weeks ago but you have received nothing. Write a letter to the manager complaining about the bad service. -Say when and how you ordered the cheque book-ask how much longer you will have to wait-a v.1

29. 09. 2017 you ordered a new cheque book from your bank two weeks ago but you have received nothing. Write a letter to the manager complaining about the bad service. -Say when and how you ordered the cheque book-ask how much longer you will have to wait-a v. 1
Globalization has increased the amount of trade between countries to a great extent and this has led to open up a question whether to prefer local products or exported products. However, Some prefer purchasing their own country made goods while others opt for international items. This essay will discuss why it's beneficial to use local products and in addition it also provides suitable examples to justify why it is essential to have this kind of buying behaviour. Firstly, purchasing locally manufactured products will contribute to the growth of the country in terms of economy. An increase in the number of people buying these products will ultimately increase the GDP of the country and in addition it also improves the global presence. For example, made in India initiative has contributed in improving India’s GDP by 10% and moreover it also opened up global opportunities for many other Indian originated companies. Hence, purchasing local products will improve country's growth in a positive way and in addition can also improve also improves global opportunities. Another strong reason for promoting native products is because of its local essence. These products carry the culture of the country and become an identity for people. For instance, Most of the Indian women wear Saree which has become a symbol for identifying them around the globe. Therefore, using native products can help to promote our culture and background. To conclude, it is beneficial for consuming native items since they help country to grow economically and also promotes the culture of the country. Hence, This essay has discussed why local products are preferred upon export products and justified it by providing suitable examples.
Globalization has increased the amount of trade between
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countries
to a great extent and this has led to open up a question whether to prefer
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local
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products
or exported
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products
.
However
,
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Some
prefer purchasing their
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own
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country
made
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goods
while others opt for international items. This essay will discuss why it's beneficial to
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use
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local
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products
and
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also
provides suitable examples to justify why it is essential to have this kind of buying
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Firstly
, purchasing
locally
manufactured
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products
will contribute to the growth of the
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country
in terms of economy. An increase in the number of
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people
buying these
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products
will
ultimately
increase the GDP of the
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country
and
in addition
it
also
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improves
the global presence.
For example
, made in India initiative has contributed in improving India’s GDP by 10% and
moreover
it
also
opened up global opportunities for
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many
other Indian originated
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companies
.
Hence
, purchasing
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local
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products
will
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improve
country's growth in a
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positive
way and
in addition
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also
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global opportunities.

Another strong reason for promoting native
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products
is
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because
of its
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local
essence. These
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products
carry the culture of the
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country
and become an identity for
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people
.
For instance
, Most of the Indian women wear Saree which has become a symbol for identifying them around the globe.
Therefore
, using native
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products
can
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help
to promote our culture and background.

To conclude
, it is beneficial for consuming native items since they
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help
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country
to grow
economically
and
also
promotes the culture of the
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country
.
Hence
, This essay has discussed why
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local
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products
are preferred
upon export
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products
and justified it by providing suitable examples.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay 29. 09. 2017 you ordered a new cheque book from your bank two weeks ago but you have received nothing. Write a letter to the manager complaining about the bad service. -Say when and how you ordered the cheque book-ask how much longer you will have to wait-a v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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