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27. 10. 2017 Something in an airport delayed you and you missed your flight. Write a letter to the airport’s customer service department. in your letter include: • What delayed you? • How missing this flight affect you? • What would you like the airport v.1

27. 10. 2017 Something in an airport delayed you and you missed your flight. Write a letter to the airport’s customer service department. in your letter include: • What delayed you? • How missing this flight affect you? • What would you like the airport v. 1
Some people believe that online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read, whereas others believe only printed material should be used. Discuss both views and give your opinion. It is claimed by an overwhelming majority of people that children should learn to read only by using online materials, while others believe that using printed materials is much more useful. I am of the opinion that both of them have their benefits and children should be given the chance to take advantage of both. There is a prominent reason why online books and materials can be seen beneficial. This is mainly because acquiring knowledge through online materials is more fun and easy. These days there are an increasing number of educational programs that are designed same as commercial games with different levels and rewards in order to increase children’s motivation for learning. For example, some teachers rely on online materials to study foreign languages. These apps use popular songs or animation to teach learning foreign languages. In this way, children learn easier and faster, as well as they have been active in the learning process. On the other hand, printed books are still preferred by a large number of people, it is mainly because they believe as online materials give children answer to any question they have; Therefore, this trend leaves children lazy and lack of creativity and they become dependent on the internet to solve any problem they face, whereas conventional books test the student’s knowledge and abilities, educators have to spend considerable time to solve questions and step by step pupils find confidence in themselves and become resilient to challenges and learn to solve their problems. In conclusion, it seems to me that both trends have negative and positive aspects and it is parents and teacher responsibility to ensure students take advantage of both.
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. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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, while others
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that using printed
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is much more useful. I am of the opinion that both of them have their benefits and
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the chance to take advantage of both.

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acquiring knowledge through
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materials
is more fun and easy. These days there are an increasing number of educational programs that
are designed
same as commercial games with
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different
levels and rewards in order to increase
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children’s
motivation for learning.
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some
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online
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materials
to study foreign languages. These apps
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use
popular songs or animation to teach learning foreign languages. In this way,
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children
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easier and faster,
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creativity and
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the student’s knowledge and abilities, educators
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In conclusion
, it seems to me that both trends have
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aspects and it is parents and teacher responsibility to ensure students take advantage of both.
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IELTS essay 27. 10. 2017 Something in an airport delayed you and you missed your flight. Write a letter to the airport’s customer service department. in your letter include: • What delayed you? • How missing this flight affect you? • What would you like the airport v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
311 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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