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2671 describe a friend who you haven't seen in yearsyou should saywhere you first met themwhy you were friends with themwhat you think they're doing nowand expalin why you haven't seen them recently v.1

2671 describe a friend who you haven't seen in yearsyou should saywhere you first met themwhy you were friends with themwhat you think they're doing nowand expalin why you haven't seen them recently v. 1
The notion that students should be taught parenting skills, as a part of their education curriculum in schools is slowly gaining popularity. I am in agreement with this idea as these lessons will impart organizational and time-management skills to students, which will not only aid them in their personal lives but will also help them in their professional lives. Firstly, I believe that a good parent must have excellent multi-tasking skills. As a child’s guardian, one ends up being responsible for various factors such as looking after their health, arranging meals, ensuring education, counselling them in their times of need, etc. Multi-tasking skills thus become necessary in order to be able to juggle these aspects. For instance, a parent may be able to send their child to school, but if they forget to provide for food in time, the child’s health greatly suffers, leading to his or her neglect and abuse (in extreme cases). Additionally, organizational skills are also imperative for good parenting. As a mother or a father, one must be able to plan a schedule in order to ensure that aspects such as food, clothing, school supplies, medical supplies, etc. are all arranged for in a timely fashion. For example, if a parent cannot plan and arrange for their child’s Diabetes medicine in advance, his or her health will worsen considerably (due to delayed medicine intake). To conclude, I believe that multi-tasking and organizational skills are imperative to not only becoming good parents, but also efficient individuals. And incorporating lessons that will teach these skills to students in schools will add to their holistic development and prepare them for their future.
The notion that students should
be taught
parenting
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skills
, as a part of their education curriculum in
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schools
is
slowly
gaining popularity. I am in agreement with this
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idea
as these lessons will impart organizational and time-management
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skills
to students, which will not
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only
aid them in their personal
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lives
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but
will
also
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help
them in their professional
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lives
.

Firstly
, I believe that a
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good
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parent
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must
have excellent multi-tasking
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skills
. As a
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child’s
guardian, one ends up being responsible for various factors such as looking after their health, arranging meals, ensuring education, counselling them in their times of need, etc. Multi-tasking
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skills
thus
become necessary in order to be able to juggle these aspects.
For instance
, a
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parent
may be able to
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send
their
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child
to
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school
,
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but
if they forget to provide for food in time, the
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child’s
health
greatly
suffers, leading to
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his or her
neglect and abuse (in extreme cases).

Additionally
, organizational
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skills
are
also
imperative for
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good
parenting. As a mother or a father, one
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be able to plan a schedule in order to ensure that aspects such as food, clothing,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
supplies, medical supplies, etc. are all arranged for in a timely fashion.
For example
, if a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parent
cannot plan and arrange for their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
child’s
Diabetes medicine in advance,
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his or her
health will worsen
considerably
(due to delayed medicine intake).

To conclude
, I believe that multi-tasking and organizational
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skills
are imperative to not
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only
becoming
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good
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parents
,
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but
also
efficient individuals. And incorporating lessons that will teach these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
to students in
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schools
will
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add
to their holistic development and prepare them for their future.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay 2671 describe a friend who you haven't seen in yearsyou should saywhere you first met themwhy you were friends with themwhat you think they're doing nowand expalin why you haven't seen them recently v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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