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250 (third attempt)Describe a writer you would like to meet. you should say: who the writer is what you know about this writer already what you would like to find out about him or her and explain why you would like to meet this writer. v.1

250 (third attempt)Describe a writer you would like to meet. you should say: who the writer is what you know about this writer already what you would like to find out about him or her and explain why you would like to meet this writer. v. 1
In the modern era of cut throat competition, people are burning their midnight oil to succeed in the life. Many people these days are migrating to the cities in search of a better life and job opportunities. This trend can be ascribed to a number of reasons and it must be addressed by a number of actions which we will discuss in the following paragraphs. Firstly, we will discuss the main reasons behind this trend. According to the latest survey 2019, the percentage of people migrating from rural to urban areas have gone up by 30%. The main reason behind this problem is lack of development in rural areas. People often change their places in search of a better standard of living and job opportunities. Also, agriculture sector these days are suffering from huge losses. It is getting difficult for farmers to earn even basic necessities of life, due to increase in the margins of the middlemen and an unavailability of farming products. For example, unavailability of good manure, new technology and good quality seeds. As a result, in a country like India, where agriculture covers almost 70% of employment is drastically going down. People are moving to urban areas in search of new jobs. Secondly, the government should take some actions to improve this situation. A strong measures should be implicated to develop the basic necessities in rural areas. Industries should be given incentives to start their business in rural areas, so that employment opportunities can be increased. There is a need to educate farmers about the new technology, good quality seeds and availability of pesticides and insecticides. The Government should deal with the farmers directly, so that they can earn maximum benefits. Furthermore, a good percentage of a budget should be assigned to the agriculture sector for its growth and development. To conclude, the food is an important part of every human being. For the development of the country, boost in the agriculture sector is important. The training centres for organic farming should be set up at different places, in order to educate farmers about the new technology and trend.
In the modern era of
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cut throat
competition,
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people
are burning their midnight oil to succeed in the life.
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Many
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people
these days are migrating to the cities in search of a better life and job opportunities. This trend can
be ascribed
to a number of reasons and it
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must
be addressed
by a number of actions which we will discuss in the following paragraphs.

Firstly
, we will discuss the main reasons behind this trend. According to the latest survey 2019, the percentage of
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people
migrating from
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rural
to urban
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areas
have gone up by 30%. The main reason behind this problem is lack of development in
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rural
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areas
.
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People
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often
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change
their places in search of a better standard of living and job opportunities.
Also
,
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agriculture
sector these days are suffering from huge losses. It is getting difficult for
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farmers
to earn even
Consider using "necessities".
basic necessities
of life, due to increase in the margins of the middlemen and an unavailability of farming products.
For example
, unavailability of
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good
manure,
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new
technology and
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good
quality seeds.
As a result
, in a country like India, where
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agriculture
covers almost 70% of employment is
drastically
going down.
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People
are moving to urban
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areas
in search of
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new
jobs.

Secondly
, the
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government
should take
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some
actions to
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improve
this situation. A strong
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measures
should
be implicated
to develop the
Consider using "necessities".
basic necessities
in
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rural
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areas
. Industries should be
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given
incentives to
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start
their business in
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rural
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areas
,
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so
that employment opportunities can
be increased
. There is a need to educate
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farmers
about the
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new
technology,
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good
quality seeds and availability of pesticides and insecticides. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
should deal with the
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farmers
directly
,
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so
that they can earn maximum benefits.
Furthermore
, a
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good
percentage of a budget should
be assigned
to the
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agriculture
sector for its growth and development.

To conclude
, the food is an
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important
part of every human being. For the development of the country, boost in the
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agriculture
sector is
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important
. The training
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centres
for organic farming should
be set
up at
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different
places, in order to educate
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farmers
about the
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new
technology and trend.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay 250 (third attempt)Describe a writer you would like to meet. you should say: who the writer is what you know about this writer already what you would like to find out about him or her and explain why you would like to meet this writer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
352 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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