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4-2. Would you prefer to go out to dinner or stay home and cook a meal? Use reasons tosupport your response. v.1

4-2. Would you prefer to go out to dinner or stay home and cook a meal? Use reasons tosupport your response. v. 1
The government sponsoring art and culture is debatable. While some people think that it is useful for everyone to know the customs and religions of the particular region, others think that it is better not to invest money. This essay will discuss both the positive and negative aspects of funding the art and traditions and why the backing for values is superior. Nowadays, everyone is forgetting the values and traditions that are followed for centuries. These customs add huge value to the particular place by describing the prominence of the particular arts. Although, the world is migrating with a tremendous speed, we should not forget the customs that are followed for a long time. We have been seeing that there is an increase in people who are visiting cities to know about traditions that are followed. Supporting the arts and culture in turn, creates the revenue by attracting the foreigners from various parts of the world. There are also minor disadvantages; some people argue that there are many areas that ministry need to focus on improving. For example, we can see that in some places people are facing the problems like not having enough drinking water and also not having good transport system. People think that the state should invest on these basic things rather than supporting the other areas. But to provide support, there needs to be a huge amount of revenue that needs to be generated in the First place. After considering all the pros and cons, it was concluded that the advantages of providing the support of art and culture far outweigh the disadvantages. In my view, government needs to support the arts and traditions that have been followed since long time to attract the visitors and to generate the revenue for the country.
The
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government
sponsoring
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art
and culture is debatable. While
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some
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people
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think
that it is useful for everyone to know the customs and religions of the particular region, others
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think
that it is better not to invest money.

This essay will discuss both the
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positive
and
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negative
aspects of funding the
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art
and
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traditions
and why the backing for values is superior.

Nowadays, everyone is forgetting the values and
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traditions
that are
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followed
for centuries. These customs
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add
huge value to the particular place by describing the prominence of the particular
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arts
. Although, the world is migrating with a tremendous speed, we should not forget the customs that are
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followed
for a long time. We have been seeing that there is an increase in
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people
who are visiting cities to know about
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traditions
that are
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followed
. Supporting the
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arts
and culture in turn, creates the revenue by attracting the foreigners from various parts of the world.

There are
also
minor disadvantages;
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some
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people
argue that there are
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many
areas that ministry
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need
to focus on improving.
For example
, we can
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see
that in
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some
places
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people
are facing the problems like not having
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enough
drinking water and
also
not having
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good
transport system.
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People
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think
that the state should invest on these basic things
rather
than supporting the other areas.
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But
to provide support, there
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needs
to be a huge amount of revenue that
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needs
to
be generated
in the
First
place.

After considering all the pros and cons, it
was concluded
that the advantages of providing the support of
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art
and culture far outweigh the disadvantages. In my view,
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government
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needs
to support the
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arts
and
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traditions
that have been
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followed
since long time to attract the visitors and to generate the revenue for the country.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay 4-2. Would you prefer to go out to dinner or stay home and cook a meal? Use reasons tosupport your response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
297 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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