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1. Some people think that it is the responsibility of governments to take care of the environment, while others believe that it is the responsibility of the citizens. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

1. Some people think that it is the responsibility of governments to take care of the environment, while others believe that it is the responsibility of the citizens. v. 1
Several individuals have an opinion that the responsibility of saving the environment of the country is the responsibility of the government, whereas, others believe that it is the duty of the society. In my opinion, I do believe that the government should take the necessary steps to ensure the safety of the environment. Many people give their consent that the government of the country plays an important role in protecting the natural habitat. The government of the nation should not only formulate laws related to environment protection but should also create awareness among the people about the problems they face related to health if the surrounding is destroyed. Moreover, the political party motivate people to use more of renewable and environment friendly source of power such as solar energy power, electric cars, hydro electric energy and so on. To elucidate, the government has banned the use of diesel cars as they emit harmful gases which causes air pollution and thus leas to breathing problems. However, some individuals agree that it is the duty of the society to protect the natural habitat of the country. People should take necessary steps to ensure that the climate of the nation is not harmed such as they should plant more trees and plants, the factories and the industries should not throw their chemical waste an pollutants in water to avoid water pollution. Furthermore, the society should avoid the use of plastic bags as they are not biodegradable and should use more paper bags. To illustrate, people are motivated travel to the office through car pool rather than taking their own personal cars this will not only reduce the traffic but will also reduce noise and air pollution thus protecting the environment. To conclude, I vehemently agree that the government plays a pivotal role in saving the nature and climate and should also formulate strict rules and regulations to be followed by people reducing the environment pollution
Several individuals have an opinion that the responsibility of saving the
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environment
of the country is the responsibility of the
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government
, whereas, others believe that it is the duty of the society. In my opinion, I do believe that the
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government
should take the necessary steps to ensure the safety of the environment.

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people
give their consent that the
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government
of the country plays an
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important
role in protecting the natural habitat. The
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government
of the nation should not
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only
formulate laws related to
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environment
protection
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but
should
also
create awareness among the
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people
about the problems they face related to health if the surrounding is
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destroyed
.
Moreover
, the political party motivate
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people
to
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use
more of renewable and
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environment
friendly source of power such as solar energy power, electric
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cars
,
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hydro electric
energy and
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so
on. To elucidate, the
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government
has banned the
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use
of diesel
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cars
as they emit harmful gases which causes air
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pollution
and
thus
leas to breathing problems.

However
,
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some
individuals
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agree
that it is the duty of the society to protect the natural habitat of the country.
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People
should take necessary steps to ensure that the climate of the nation is not harmed such as they should plant more trees and plants, the factories and the industries should not throw their chemical waste
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an pollutants
in water to avoid water
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pollution
.
Furthermore
, the society should avoid the
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use
of plastic bags as they are not biodegradable and should
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use
more paper bags. To illustrate,
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people
are motivated
travel to the office through
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car
pool
rather
than taking their
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own
personal
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cars
this will not
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only
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reduce
the traffic
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but
will
also
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reduce
noise and air
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pollution
thus
protecting the environment.

To conclude
, I
vehemently
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agree
that the
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government
plays a pivotal role in saving the nature and climate and should
also
formulate strict
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rules
and regulations to
be followed
by
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people
reducing the
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environment
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pollution
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay 1. Some people think that it is the responsibility of governments to take care of the environment, while others believe that it is the responsibility of the citizens. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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