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For many shopping malls are great places to spend their leisure time and meet others People however in the past mostly visited those when necessary To what extent do you think this is a negative trend Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant v.3

For many shopping malls are great places to spend their leisure time and meet others People however in the past mostly visited those when necessary To what extent do you think this is a negative trend 3
In the current scenario, people prefer to spend their idle hours in shopping complexes with their friends and family than pursuing their hobbies or any other outdoor activities. Due to this there are shopping malls in every nook and corner of the country to attract people. Despite the few positive aspects, there are several negative aspects of shopping malls which will be discussed further in this essay. To embark on, modern shopping malls are a hub of many attractions like restaurants, movie theatre, food court, salons, branded clothing, cosmetics, massage parlour, kids’ zone, grocery store and so on in other words everything is available to humans under one roof. People are often seen spending their time shopping or having a dine out in these shopping plazas as they believe that it helps to distress themselves from the daily mundane activities. For example, The young generation spends most of the quality time after their colleges or coaching centres with their friends in these plazas watching a movie or enjoying a meal. Moreover, the shopping mall magnetises the people by offering discounts and offers on clothing, cosmetics and grocery shopping that is why they prefer to visit the malls most of the time. On the contrary, there are many ill effects linked with the shopping malls. Physical activity of people has reduced as they do not prefer to follow their leisure interest, play any sport or do physical exercise. Moreover, people spend their time in shopping malls having junk and innutritious food. For example, earlier this year a WHO study concluded that due to the mall culture obesity has increased at an alarming rate among young adults. Furthermore, People are becoming more shopaholic spending their hard-earned money on purchasing unnecessary things from malls. To conclude, the disadvantages of shopping malls far outweigh the advantages. People should consider curtailing mall visits for inconsequential activities and only consider them when no other option is available.
In the
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scenario,
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people
prefer to spend their idle hours in
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shopping
complexes with their friends and family than pursuing their hobbies or any other outdoor
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activities
. Due to this there are
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shopping
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malls
in every nook and corner of the country to attract
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people
. Despite the few
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positive
aspects, there are several
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negative
aspects of
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shopping
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malls
which will
be discussed
further
in this essay.

To embark on, modern
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shopping
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malls
are a hub of
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many
attractions like restaurants, movie
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theatre
, food court, salons, branded clothing, cosmetics, massage
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parlour
, kids’ zone, grocery store and
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so
on
in other words
everything is available to humans under one roof.
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are
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often
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seen
spending their time
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shopping
or having
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a dine
out in these
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plazas as they believe that it
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helps
to distress themselves from the daily mundane
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activities
.
For example
, The young generation spends most of the quality time after their colleges or coaching
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centres
with their friends in these plazas watching a movie or enjoying a meal.
Moreover
, the
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shopping
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mall
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magnetises
the
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people
by offering discounts and offers on clothing, cosmetics and grocery
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shopping
that is
why they prefer to visit the
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malls
most of the time.

On the contrary
, there are
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many
ill effects linked with the
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shopping
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malls
. Physical
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activity
of
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people
has
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reduced
as they do not prefer to follow their leisure interest, play any sport or do physical exercise.
Moreover
,
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people
spend their time in
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shopping
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malls
having junk and
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innutritious
food.
For example
, earlier this year a WHO study concluded that due to the
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mall
culture obesity has increased at an alarming rate among young adults.
Furthermore
,
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People
are becoming more shopaholic spending their
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hard
-earned money on purchasing unnecessary things from malls.

To conclude
, the disadvantages of
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shopping
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malls
far outweigh the advantages.
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People
should consider curtailing
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mall
visits for inconsequential
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activities
and
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only
consider them when no other option is available.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay For many shopping malls are great places to spend their leisure time and meet others People however in the past mostly visited those when necessary To what extent do you think this is a negative trend 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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