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1. Some people believe that technology has made man more sociable and others think that it has made us less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion? v.1

1. Some people believe that technology has made man more sociable and others think that it has made us less sociable. v. 1
There are many people who have called into question the benefits of learning a foreign language. At first glance, work and travel are relatively main reasons, however, those are not the only ground for being bilingual. Most people hold views that they only need a foreign speech when they work or travel to another country. Ordinarily, speaking is a sole tool for human to communicate and understand each other. People cannot work if they do not know exactly what their boss or colleagues are saying. Similarly, individuals also will not have a pleasant trip if they face trouble to communicate with others. Furthermore, in our 'beautiful' world, humans require to have advanced language skill for being acceptable to sophisticated countries, which is the main basis that go to IELTS or SAT. On the other hand, learning another native tongue offers a tremendous opportunity to gain insight into a foreign culture. For example, the Russian has numerous classical novels written in it. While these novels have been translated into many mother tongues, one has into learn Russian to be able to read the original. Moreover, the tongue is an alleyway for finding distinct people, which could be their best friend or love of their life. This chance is enchanting when a person knows more speech. Nonetheless, society is missing this opportunity in their life. In conclusion, I would like emphasise, considering all the points mentioned above it is not hard to see that travelling or working in a foreign country is one of the ground for learning new language. Notwithstanding, there are more crucial, enormous grounds in human’s life, such as, finding love or devotion which come by learning new dialects.
There are
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learning
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foreign
language. At
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ground for being bilingual.

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hold views that they
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speech when they work or travel to another country.
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, speaking is a sole tool for human to communicate and understand each other.
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People
cannot work if they do not know exactly what their boss or colleagues are saying.
Similarly
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also
will not have a pleasant trip if they face trouble to communicate with others.
Furthermore
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for being acceptable to sophisticated countries, which is the main basis that go to IELTS or SAT.

On the other hand
,
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learning
another native tongue offers a tremendous opportunity to gain insight into a
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foreign
culture.
For example
, the Russian has numerous classical novels written in it. While these novels have
been translated
into
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many
mother tongues, one has into learn Russian to be able to read the original.
Moreover
, the tongue is an alleyway for finding distinct
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people
, which could be their best friend or
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love
of their life. This chance is enchanting when a person knows more speech. Nonetheless, society is missing this opportunity in their life.

In conclusion
, I would like
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, considering all the points mentioned above it is not
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that travelling or working in a
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country is one of the ground for
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learning
new language. Notwithstanding, there are more crucial, enormous grounds in human’s life, such as, finding
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love
or devotion which
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by
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new dialects.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay 1. Some people believe that technology has made man more sociable and others think that it has made us less sociable. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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