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1. Some people believe that it is important to give gifts to friends and family to show that we care about them. Others think that there are better ways to show that we care. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

1. Some people believe that it is important to give gifts to friends and family to show that we care about them. Others think that there are better ways to show that we care. v. 2
Gifts and presents are a token of love and affection to the loved one and family members. Several individuals agree that it is mandatory for people to give gifts to their family members and love ones to express their care, whereas, others have this opinion that there are different ways to show their love and care. In my opinion, I do believe that besides of giving presents there are many different ways show the love and affection. Many citizens believe that the best way to express to the love and care for someone is by helping them in their difficult times as it will be remembered for lifetime. Expensive gifts and presents have limited shelf life and do not express the true feeling of someone. Moreover, by compassionately caring for some one and taking care of the person when he needs love and affection the most has deeper impact on that person. To elucidate, if a person who is suffering from some health issues, taking care of the health and supporting them financially is the moment cherished for life. However, some people believe that giving gifts is the most expressive way of showing their deep affection and fondness. As these things are tangible and will persistently remind us about the true feeling of some one. Moreover, the surprise gifts received to someone who need that thing for a long time on special occasion will be appreciated and adored for lifetime. To illustrate, if a child is gifted a bicycle on his birthday, he will remember and love that gift for lifetime. To conclude, I vehemently agree that to help someone in difficult times or to take care and express the love to a person in need is the best way of expressing affection and true feeling, moreover it will be appreciated and remembered for entire life
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love
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be remembered
for lifetime. Expensive
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and presents have limited shelf life and do not
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express
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.
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person
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the most has deeper impact on that
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person
. To elucidate, if a
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person
who is suffering from
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some
health issues, taking
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care
of the health and supporting them
financially
is the moment cherished for life.

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,
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some
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people
believe that giving
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gifts
is the most expressive
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way
of showing their deep
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affection
and fondness. As these things are tangible and will
persistently
remind us about the true feeling of
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some one
.
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, the surprise
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received to
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someone
who need that thing for a long time on special occasion will
be appreciated
and adored for lifetime. To illustrate, if a child
is gifted
a bicycle on his birthday, he will remember and
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love
that
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gift
for lifetime.

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, I
vehemently
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agree
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help
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someone
in difficult times or to take
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care
and
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express
the
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to a
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person
in need is the best
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way
of expressing
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affection
and true feeling,
moreover
it will
be appreciated
and remembered for entire life
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS essay 1. Some people believe that it is important to give gifts to friends and family to show that we care about them. Others think that there are better ways to show that we care. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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