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Some people believe that it is important to give gifts to friends and family to show that we care about them. Others think that there are better ways to show that we care. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people believe that it is important to give gifts to friends and family to show that we care about them. Others think that there are better ways to show that we care. v. 1
Gifting is a common practise that happens all around the globe and is considered to be a remarkable way to show love and gratitude to your loved ones. While, on the other hand, people believe that there are many different ideas to show someone that you actually care for them. In this particular essay we are going to dicuss both of these views. Firstly, considering the trend of gifting, it will always be considered as a noteworthy way to show affection to someone, perhaps, it is also an easy escape for many people. Secondly, giving gifts is an old traditional trend that can never be eradicated. In addition to this, people love to give gifts no matter it is an expensive one or not the sense of pleasure that is drived through it is the most expensive feeling. However, on the other hand, certain people hold a different opinion. As they believe that there are many other way to show care and respect to others. For example, you cannot appear on someones funeral with a gift, as your main motive was to show love for them, but you will not. Besides this, just being available for a person that needs you in his hard time is the most essential thing. Furthermore, giving surprises to your friends and parents on their big days, apart for giving presents is also a great gesture as it requires your real efforts. All in all, in my personal opinion, giving gifts and presents to your peers will always be the best way to shower them with your love, whereas, extra efforts apart from gifting shows your true love and willingness to make someone happy.
Gifting is a common
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practise
that happens all around the globe and
is considered
to be a remarkable way to
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show
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love
and gratitude to your
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loved
ones. While, on the
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other
hand,
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people
believe that there are
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many
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different
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ideas
to
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show
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someone
that you actually care for them. In this particular essay we are going to
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dicuss
both of these views.

Firstly
, considering the trend of gifting, it will always
be considered
as a noteworthy way to
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show
affection to
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someone
, perhaps, it is
also
an easy escape for
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many
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people
.
Secondly
,
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giving
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gifts
is an
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old
traditional trend that can never
be eradicated
.
In addition
to this,
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people
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love
to give
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gifts
no matter it is an expensive one or not the sense of pleasure
that is
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drived
through it is the most expensive feeling.

However
, on the
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other
hand, certain
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people
hold a
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different
opinion. As they believe that there are
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many
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other
way to
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show
care and respect to others.
For example
, you cannot appear on
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someones
funeral with a
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gift
, as your main motive was to
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show
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love
for them,
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but
you will not.
Besides
this,
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just
being available for a person that needs you in his
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hard
time is the most essential thing.
Furthermore
,
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giving
surprises to your friends and parents on their
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big
days, apart for
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giving
presents is
also
a great gesture as it requires your real efforts.

All in all, in my personal opinion,
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giving
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gifts
and presents to your peers will always be the best way to shower them with your
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love
, whereas, extra efforts apart from gifting
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shows
your true
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love
and willingness to
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make
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someone
happy.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is important to give gifts to friends and family to show that we care about them. Others think that there are better ways to show that we care. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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