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1611 Describe a rule in school you agree or disagree withWhat the rule isWhy it is neededHow the rule is enforcedand explain why you agree of disagree with this rule v.1

1611 Describe a rule in school you agree or disagree withWhat the rule isWhy it is neededHow the rule is enforcedand explain why you agree of disagree with this rule v. 1
In recent years, there is no doubt that, the work from home is being widely encouraged. While some believe that, working from home is advantageous to both the employees and their family members, the others opine with this scenario being more stressful to everyone involved. I support the view that it affects the personal life of the employee negatively. Those who advocate the perks of working from home may argue that, this would make employee’s life more convenient. For instance, if an employee has taken the option of working from home, it can notably cut down his/her daily commute time. Also, another major benefit of this practice is, it helps to mitigate the traffic ordeals created by uncontrolled vehicular usage for daily travel to work. In turn, cutting down on the daily exposure to vehicular pollution improves the overall health of the working class. However, I would argue that the negative side-effects of remote work surpass the benefits stated above, at any given time. It is quite necessary to understand that, the definitive work hours of a is the key psychological factor, which drives the emotional well being of the employees. For example, the work-from-home facility, which many companies offer, makes the employees to extend beyond the normal working period, say 9 hours per day. This, in turn, leaves less room for employee personal time, which builds up stress in them. Moreover, to add one benefit of work from office, efficient team working is enabled due to personal one-to-one relations that team develops over the time. This is a key factor contributing towards the overall performance of the company and the individual. If, instead, remote working is opted, this sense of belongingness and ownership will be lost. In conclusion, while staying at home and working might save the hassles of the employees, staying in office and working proves to be more productive and collaborative, as well as it creates team spirit. Hence, in my view, employment providers should create the required favourable conditions, and encourage everyone to work from their workspace.
In recent years, there is no doubt that, the
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work
from home is being
widely
encouraged. While
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some
believe that,
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working
from home is advantageous to both the
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employees
and their family members, the others opine with this scenario being more stressful to everyone involved. I support the view that it affects the personal life of the
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employee
negatively
.

Those who advocate the perks of
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working
from home may argue that, this would
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make
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employee’s
life more convenient.
For instance
, if an
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employee
has taken the option of
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working
from home, it can
notably
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cut
down his/her daily commute
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time
.
Also
, another major benefit of this practice is, it
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helps
to mitigate the traffic ordeals created by uncontrolled vehicular usage for daily travel to
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work
. In turn, cutting down on the daily exposure to vehicular pollution
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improves
the
overall
health of the
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working
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class
.

However
, I would argue that the
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negative
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side-effects
of remote
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work
surpass the benefits stated above, at any
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given
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time
. It is quite necessary to understand that, the definitive
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work
hours of
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a
is the key psychological factor, which drives the emotional
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well being
of the
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employees
.
For example
, the work-from-home facility, which
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many
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companies
offer,
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makes
the
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employees
to extend beyond the normal
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working
period, say 9 hours per day. This, in turn,
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leaves
less room for
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employee
personal
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time
, which builds up
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stress
in them.

Moreover
, to
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add
one benefit of
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work
from office, efficient team
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working
is enabled
due to personal one-to-one relations that team develops over the
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time
. This is a key factor contributing towards the
overall
performance of the
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company
and the individual. If,
instead
, remote
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working
is opted
, this sense of
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belongingness
and ownership will
be lost
.

In conclusion
, while staying at home and
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working
might save the hassles of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employees
, staying in office and
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working
proves to be more productive and collaborative,
as well
as it creates team spirit.
Hence
, in my view, employment providers should create the required
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favourable
conditions, and encourage everyone to
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work
from their workspace.
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IELTS essay 1611 Describe a rule in school you agree or disagree withWhat the rule isWhy it is neededHow the rule is enforcedand explain why you agree of disagree with this rule v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
341 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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