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1304 Describe a person who has an important job. You should say: who the person iswhere the person workswhat the person does in the joband explain why you think the person’s job is important. v.1

1304 Describe a person who has an important job. You should say: who the person iswhere the person workswhat the person does in the joband explain why you think the person’s job is important. v. 1
Wearing a uniform at workplace is a great idea and it is becoming more popular in today's trend. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of wearing homogeneous clothes on the job. There is a plethora of benefits of wearing uniform. First of all, when employees wear uniforms they feel discipline, which is the most imperative role in any company 's growth. After that, if an organisation has an inflexible clothing policy, then it is a good walking advertisement. For instance, employees finish their job, went out, everyone can see the logo of the company and the name of the company, which is a free advertisement. Then, having a uniform, can be time saving. For example, in the morning, there will no confusion of 'what to wear'. Furthermore, an orderly clothing creates team unity, workers act as a team and working as a team to produce more products. On the other hand, a uniform always comes to security and safety. To illustrate, a factory worker cannot wear a tie, he/she have to wear simple and protective clothes. Last but not the least, it can be budget friendly, employees do not need to spent money on shopping clothes for work. The drawbacks are that it can be boring, normally folks do not like to wear the same clothes every day. Because change is a law of nature. Also, a uniform can effected on person's self expression and the individual. Thus, people have their own choices. Finally, if employees do not comfortable in their uniforms, there might be declining in production. To conclude, I would like to say that there are more advantages than disadvantages of systematic clothes in the workplace. They teach us discipline, teamwork and it is beneficial for employees as well as for management.
Wearing a
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uniform
at workplace is a great
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idea
and it is becoming more popular in
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today
's trend. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of wearing homogeneous
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clothes
on the job.

There is a plethora of benefits of wearing
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uniform
.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, when
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employees
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wear
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uniforms
they feel discipline, which is the most imperative role in any
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company
's growth. After that, if an
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organisation
has an inflexible clothing policy, then it is a
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good
walking advertisement.
For instance
,
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employees
finish their job, went out, everyone can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
the logo of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
and the name of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
, which is a free advertisement. Then, having a
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uniform
, can be time saving.
For example
, in the morning, there will no confusion of 'what to wear'.

Furthermore
, an orderly clothing creates team unity, workers act as a team and working as a team to produce more products.
On the other hand
, a
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uniform
always
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comes
to security and safety. To illustrate, a factory worker cannot
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wear
a tie, he/she
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have to
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wear
simple and protective
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clothes
. Last
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but
not the least, it can be budget friendly,
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employees
do not need to spent money on shopping
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clothes
for work.

The drawbacks are that it can be boring,
normally
folks do not like to
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wear
the same
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clothes
every day.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
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change
is a law of nature.
Also
, a
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uniform
can effected on person's
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
self expression
and the individual.
Thus
,
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people
have their
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own
choices.
Finally
, if
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employees
do not comfortable in their
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uniforms
, there might be declining in production.

To conclude
, I would like to say that there are more advantages than disadvantages of systematic
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clothes
in the workplace. They teach us discipline, teamwork and it is beneficial for
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employees
as well
as for management.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay 1304 Describe a person who has an important job. You should say: who the person iswhere the person workswhat the person does in the joband explain why you think the person’s job is important. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
299 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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