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Desbribe a language other than English that you would like to learn. You should say: what the language iswhere it is spokenwhat you think would be difficult and what would be easy about learning language and explain why you would like to learn it. v.1

Desbribe a language other than English that you would like to learn. You should say: what the language iswhere it is spokenwhat you think would be difficult and what would be easy about learning language and explain why you would like to learn it. v. 1
There is no doubt that art is important, but it is debatable whether it should be sponsored by the government. Some insist that the government is wasting money on the arts. In their opinion, there are many useful things that need to be focused rather than emphasizing the arts. I agree with this opinion. For one thing, arts promotions and events can be organized by many other private organizations or society clubs and you do not really need a government intervention to run the show. There are many clubs such as Lion’s club or YMCC clubs that can take the initiative and sponsor such events. For example, a music program or an exhibition of paintings can be organized by a local club and there is no need for the government to sponsor it. There are also many rich people who take pleasure in sponsoring art shows and programmes. When the government does not have to spend money on arts it can focus on developing core areas like education, healthcare and infrastructure. Poverty, illiteracy and malnutrition are still a major problem in many countries around the world. For example, in India, millions of students still do not go to school. Likewise, there are numerous homeless people. Therefore, instead of spending the public funds on arts, the government should try to improve the health of its people. It should ensure that all children are going to school and they have access to good food and potable water. In conclusion, while arts events and programmes are important for the society, they should not be sponsored by the tax money contributed by people. The government should focus on more important areas and use its money for the benefit and upliftment of the human society.
There is no doubt that
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art
is
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important
,
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but
it is debatable whether it should
be sponsored
by the
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government
.
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Some
insist that the
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government
is wasting
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money
on the
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arts
. In their opinion, there are
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many
useful things that need to
be focused
rather
than emphasizing the
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arts
. I
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agree
with this opinion.

For one thing,
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arts
promotions and
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events
can
be organized
by
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many
other private organizations or society
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clubs
and you do not
really
need a
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government
intervention to run the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
. There are
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many
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clubs
such as Lion’s
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club
or
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YMCC
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clubs
that can take the initiative and sponsor such
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events
.
For example
, a music program or an exhibition of paintings can
be organized
by a local
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club
and there is no need for the
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government
to sponsor it. There are
also
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many
rich
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people
who take pleasure in sponsoring
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art
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shows
and
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programmes
.

When the
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government
does not
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have to
spend
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money
on
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arts
it can focus on developing core areas like education, healthcare and infrastructure. Poverty, illiteracy and malnutrition are
still
a major problem in
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many
countries around the world.
For example
, in India, millions of students
still
do not go to school.
Likewise
, there are numerous homeless
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people
.
Therefore
,
instead
of spending the public funds on
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arts
, the
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government
should try to
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improve
the health of its
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people
. It should ensure that all children are going to
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school and
they have access to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
food and potable water.

In conclusion
, while
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arts
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events
and
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programmes
are
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important
for the society, they should not
be sponsored
by the tax
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money
contributed by
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people
. The
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government
should focus on more
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important
areas and
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use
its
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money
for the benefit and
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upliftment
of the human society.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
A man who knows two languages is worth two men.
French Proverb

IELTS essay Desbribe a language other than English that you would like to learn. You should say: what the language iswhere it is spokenwhat you think would be difficult and what would be easy about learning language and explain why you would like to learn it. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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