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2180 describe your favorite photographwhere was the photo takenwho took the photowhat can be seen from the photoexplain why it is the favorite photograph for you v.1

2180 describe your favorite photographwhere was the photo takenwho took the photowhat can be seen from the photoexplain why it is the favorite photograph for you v. 1
News has become an important aspect of daily life, everyone is keen on knowing what is happening around them. But nowadays news editors manipulates news, according to their interest and benefit and giving more importance to unpleasant news rather than informative or good news. In the earlier days there were only few news channels and print media, but now the thing is entirely changed. There are plenty of channels and newspapers are available nowadays. Therefore, the public often gets confused which one should they trust, when they are reading or watching a news because of sheer difference of facts presented in various news agencies. The majority of the news media are influenced in some way or another, everyone has their on interest when they report some incidents. For instance, in India almost all the political parties owns a channel also some business groups also. They are all using these channels to improve their public image or convey their interest to the general public. Furthermore, multinational companies also have some control over these media as they are the major source of revenues of these channels. In addition, news agencies currently giving more importance to bad news like controversies or wars. They always think this is the best strategy to get public attention, sadly they actually succeeded in this by a large extent. It is quite common that, if there is some natural disasters or political controversies people tend to watch more news about it. The public is more keen on knowing such kind of incidents. In my opinion, the media should change their strategy and give more weightage to good news. In such way they can able to create a positive energy in society's mind. On top that this will also help to boost the morale of persons especially youths. To recapitulate, the news media has a great influence in people's life, so they should be more careful when they are broadcasting news also they should report incidents genuinely without being biased.
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has become an
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aspect of daily life, everyone is keen on knowing what is happening around them.
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nowadays
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editors manipulates
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news
, according to their interest and benefit and giving more importance to unpleasant
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rather
than informative or
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good
news.

In the earlier days there were
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only
few
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news
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channels
and print
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media
,
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but
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now
the thing is
entirely
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changed
. There are
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plenty
of
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channels
and newspapers are available nowadays.
Therefore
, the
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public
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often
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gets
confused which one should they trust, when they are reading or watching a
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news
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because
of sheer difference of facts presented in various
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news
agencies. The majority of the
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news
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media
are influenced
in
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some
way or another, everyone has their on interest when they report
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some
incidents.
For instance
, in India almost all the political parties
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owns
a
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channel
also
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some
business groups
also
. They are all using these
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channels
to
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improve
their
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public
image or convey their interest to the general
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public
.
Furthermore
, multinational
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companies
also
have
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some
control over these
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media
as they are the major source of revenues of these channels.

In addition
,
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news
agencies
currently
giving more importance to
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bad
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news
like controversies or wars. They always
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think
this is the best strategy to
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get
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public
attention,
sadly
they actually succeeded in this by a large extent. It is quite common that, if there is
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some
natural disasters or political controversies
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people
tend to
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watch
more
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news
about it. The
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public
is more keen on knowing such kind of incidents. In my opinion, the
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media
should
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change
their strategy and give more weightage to
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good
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news
. In such way they
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can able to
create a
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positive
energy in society's mind. On top that this will
also
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help
to boost the morale of persons
especially
youths.

To recapitulate, the
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news
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media
has a great influence in
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people
's life,
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so
they should be more careful when they are broadcasting
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news
also
they should report incidents
genuinely
without
being biased
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay 2180 describe your favorite photographwhere was the photo takenwho took the photowhat can be seen from the photoexplain why it is the favorite photograph for you v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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