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12. You recently enjoyed a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter: •give details of your visit to the restaurant•mention the reas v.1

12. You recently enjoyed a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter: •give details of your visit to the restaurant•mention the reas v. 1
In these decades, the business world is getting change due to the development of some conditions. There are many reasons in terms of altering job opportunity, so people can not want to stay at same career. I will suggest some technological devices to catch up the time and keep an eye on the future in these below paragraphs. In the modern life, technology is developing day by day. The invention of high tech devices usually takes over the people's business. That is to say, robots or other devices can manage individuals' work or they can access same successful like as a human. Therefore, everybody is wondering about their future position in career. For instance, a robotic surgery provide in many countries, due to the fact that surgeons felt anxiety about losing jobs. On the other hand, robots cannot utilize everything, because of they should controlled by the individual. Admittedly, if you take care about your business future, you can do your best, even if all high technology are surrounding us. The most important thing is to be conscious about your career needs. On the other hand, communication is increasing around the job areas. The human resources can find their candidate who is the most brilliant by using the internet. Meanwhile, other employment's position is in danger if he or she cannot reach last development or changing. However, it is possible to join congress, seminar in order to remember literature about work. The transport systems or some funds have been more accessible than ever recently. Clearly, to learn something is plenty easier than the past. Everybody should follow new trends in career position, and should work not hard but cleverly. In conclusion, I restate that the modern life has really great choices for the people sometimes being stressful, although stay in time or estimate the future is frequently possible by the internet or other learning hubs. In other words, if the individuals do not want to lose their employment's trust, they should read every single time a new trendy and articles linking to future's work.
In these decades, the business world is getting
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change
due to the development of
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some
conditions. There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
reasons in terms of altering job opportunity,
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so
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
can not want to stay at same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
career
. I will suggest
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
technological devices to catch up the time and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
an eye on the
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future
in these below paragraphs.

In the modern life, technology is developing day by day. The invention of high tech devices
usually
takes over the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's business.
That is
to say, robots or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
devices can manage individuals'
Use a comma before 'or' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
work or
they can access same successful like as a human.
Therefore
, everybody is wondering about their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
future
position in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
career
.
For instance
, a robotic surgery provide in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
countries, due to the fact that surgeons felt anxiety about losing jobs. On the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
hand, robots cannot utilize everything,
Probable usage error. Use "because they" instead.
because of they
should
The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: "control"
controlled
by the individual.
Admittedly
, if you take care about your business
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
future
, you can do your best, even if all high technology are surrounding us. The most
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
thing is to be conscious about your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
career
needs.

On the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
hand, communication is increasing around the job areas. The human resources can find their candidate who is the most brilliant by using the internet. Meanwhile,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
employment's position is in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
danger
if he or she cannot reach last development or changing.
However
, it is possible to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
congress, seminar in order to remember literature about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
. The transport systems or
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
funds have been more accessible than ever recently.
Clearly
, to learn something is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
easier than the past. Everybody should follow new trends in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
career
position, and should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
cleverly
.

In conclusion
, I restate that the modern life has
really
great choices for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
being stressful, although stay in time or estimate the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
future
is
frequently
possible by the internet or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
learning hubs. In
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
words, if the individuals do not want to lose their employment's trust, they should read every single time a new trendy and articles linking to future's
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay 12. You recently enjoyed a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter: •give details of your visit to the restaurant•mention the reas v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
344 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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