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The diagram below shows how potato chips are made. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. v.1

The diagram below shows how potato chips are made.
It is often believed by some sections of society that, animals are a living creature for which, they should be treated fairly like human beings. In contrast to this, others think, pets can be utilized for myriads of medical experiments and a source of food. Following essay will discuss both arguments and how such a problem can be solved if human responsibly use animals for the development of mankind. Nowadays, problems associated with the negative impact of imprudent human activities towards animals have become a great concern. In other words, some people believed that god has created animals to live like us and human shouldn’t kill or destroy them for his personal use and entertainment. They are worried about cruel acts of mankind will extinct many species of animals. For example, a recent survey said that, by every year number of tigers are decreasing significantly and there are very few countries remain where such creatures are still surviving. Hence many human acts have brought theft on innocent animals’ life. On the other hand, from the time of civilization has come to exist, we employed animals to have a better life. Because of the increase in necessity of medical researches to find cures for illnesses, scientist start conducting their most of the biological experiments on pets. In addition, many people use pets not only as a food, but also as a prime occupational source. For instance, in the Nashik city, poultry business is the main source of income of many individuals. Therefore, such an important species proves to be useful in many ways to a society. In conclusion, as a living thing, animals also deserves an equal right as humans. In my opinion, considering so many needs of such a creature, for better life in the world we should employ them for development and progress instead of entertainment.
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some
sections of society that,
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animals
are a living creature for which, they should
be treated
fairly
like
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human
beings.
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to this, others
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think
, pets can
be utilized
for myriads of medical experiments and a source of food. Following essay will discuss both arguments and how such a problem can
be solved
if
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human
responsibly
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use
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animals
for the development of mankind.

Nowadays, problems associated with the
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negative
impact of imprudent
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human
activities towards
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animals
have become a great concern.
In other words
,
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some
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people
believed that god has created
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animals
to
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live
like us and
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human
shouldn’t kill or
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destroy
them for his personal
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use
and entertainment. They
are worried
about cruel acts of mankind will extinct
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many
species of
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animals
.
For example
, a recent survey said that, by every year number of tigers are decreasing
significantly
and there are
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very
few countries remain where such creatures are
still
surviving.
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many
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human
acts have brought theft on innocent
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animals’
life.

On the other hand
, from the time of civilization has
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come
to exist, we employed
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animals
to have a better life.
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Because
of the increase in necessity of medical researches to find cures for illnesses, scientist
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start
conducting their most of the biological experiments on pets.
In addition
,
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many
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people
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use
pets not
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only
as a food,
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but
also
as a prime occupational source.
For instance
, in the Nashik city, poultry business is the main source of income of
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many
individuals.
Therefore
, such an
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important
species proves to be useful in
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many
ways to a society.

In conclusion
, as a living thing,
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animals
also
deserves an equal right as
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humans
. In my opinion, considering
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so
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many
needs of such a creature, for better life in the world we should employ them for development and progress
instead
of entertainment.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The diagram below shows how potato chips are made.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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