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You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. Write a letter to the restaurant to thank them. Mention the food, service and the atmosphere. Also sugg v.12

You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. Write a letter to the restaurant to thank them. Mention the food, service and the atmosphere. Also sugg v. 12
Dear Sir, Last week, I celebrated my birthday in your hotel and I am writing this letter to express my gratitude for making party enjoyable. Overall, I consider the whole party as properly arranged and people enjoyed fully, especially the music evening where singer sung the on-demand songs and fulfilled my guest’s expectation. It was difficult to believe that orchestra was common for all guests belonging to other parties as they took more than five requests from my group only and thoroughly entertained. Besides music, people also like the food, both starter and main course, one of my friend said that ‘Paneer Tikka’ was sumptuous and garlic sauce was awesome in taste. I came to place little early and precisely observed the lightening and it was perfect for small parties. There are couples of things which I would like to be more perfect. Firstly, the seating arrange in food area. For indoor birthday party, I think that chairs should be placed in row rather than in start combination. Secondly, though it was buffet, people had to wait for curries at counter. I hope that my advice would be helpful in effective organizing the parties. I am looking forward to meet you next sometime. Yours faithfully, PONA
Dear Sir,

Last week, I celebrated my birthday in your
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
hotel and
I am writing this letter to express my gratitude for making
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
enjoyable.

Overall
, I consider the whole
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
as
properly
arranged and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
enjoyed
fully
,
especially
the music evening where singer sung the on-demand songs and fulfilled my guest’s expectation. It was difficult to believe that orchestra was common for all guests belonging to other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parties
as they took more than five requests from my group
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
and
thoroughly
entertained.
Besides
music,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
also
like the food, both starter and main course, one of my friend said that ‘
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Paneer
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Tikka
’ was sumptuous and garlic sauce was awesome in taste. I came to place
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
early and
precisely
observed the lightening and it was perfect for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
parties.

There are couples of things which I would like to be more perfect.
Firstly
, the seating arrange in food area. For indoor birthday
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that chairs should
be placed
in row
rather
than in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
combination.
Secondly
, though it was buffet,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
had to wait for curries at counter.

I hope that my advice would be helpful in effective organizing the parties.

I am looking forward to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you
next
sometime.

Yours
faithfully
,

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PONA
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. Write a letter to the restaurant to thank them. Mention the food, service and the atmosphere. Also sugg v. 12

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
205 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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