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TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 4 - Explain how the examples of tying shoes and learning to type demonstrate the principle of audience effects. - Preparation Time: 30 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v.1

TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 4 - Explain how the examples of tying shoes and learning to type demonstrate the principle of audience effects. - Preparation Time: 30 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v. 1
With the advancement in the transportation industry, many believe that new railway lines should be constructed for rapid intercity mass transportation, while others argue that the preexisting public transport facilities should be improved. In my opinion, I am of the view that new railway line construction is the way forward because it will reduce the travelling time and it is more environmentally friendly. On the one hand, many people are of the view that funds should be utilized to improve the already present public transport system because it is more economical and convenient. Clearly, it would require much less effort and amount of money to renovate a preexisting system than to construct a new one altogether. For instance, in my country, the cost of expansion of mass-transit metro buses was ten times less than the construction of the Orange train line, although both have the similar passenger capacity. It is because of this reason, that people favour renovation of the old systems. On the other hand, others argue that construction of new railway lines is the best option. One reason for it is that it will reduce the travelling time between the cities. In this era of materialism, life is extremely fast as it is said that "time is money". Therefore, people would like to travel by a medium which is fast and economical. The modern, fast trains fulfil this criteria and hence, preferred by many for this reason. Another factor to be considered is that trains are more environmentally friendly than other facilities. To give you an example, the amount of carbon dioxide produced per passenger by trains is three times less than that produced by buses and six times less when personal cars are used for transportation. Environmentalists, therefore, recommend that new fast trains should be financed rather than spending on old systems. To conclude, I believe that although financing the existing public transport is economical, the benefits of making new tracks for fast trains are more significant. Hence, more should be spent on trains rather than the other systems.
With the advancement in the transportation industry,
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many
believe that
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new
railway
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lines
should
be constructed
for rapid intercity mass transportation, while others argue that the preexisting public transport facilities should be
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improved
. In my opinion, I am of the view that
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new
railway
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line
construction is the way forward
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because
it will
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reduce
the travelling
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time
and it is more
environmentally
friendly.

On the one hand,
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many
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people
are of the view that funds should
be utilized
to
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improve
the already present public transport system
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because
it is more economical and convenient.
Clearly
, it would require much
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less
effort and amount of money to renovate a preexisting system than to construct a
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new
one altogether.
For instance
, in my country, the cost of expansion of mass-transit metro buses was ten
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times
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less
than the construction of the Orange
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train
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line
, although both have the similar passenger capacity. It is
because of this
reason, that
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people
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favour
renovation of the
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old
systems.

On the
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other
hand, others argue that construction of
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new
railway
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lines
is the best option. One reason for it is that it will
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reduce
the travelling
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time
between the cities. In this era of materialism, life is
extremely
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fast
as it
is said
that
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time is money
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"
.
Therefore
,
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people
would like to travel by a medium which is
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fast
and economical. The modern,
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fast
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trains
fulfil
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this
criteria and
hence
, preferred by
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many
for this reason
.

Another factor to
be considered
is that
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trains
are more
environmentally
friendly than
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other
facilities. To give you an example, the amount of carbon dioxide produced per passenger by
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trains
is three
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times
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less
than that produced by buses and six
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times
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less
when personal cars are
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used
for transportation. Environmentalists,
therefore
, recommend that
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new
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fast
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trains
should
be financed
rather
than spending on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
systems.

To conclude
, I believe that although financing the existing public transport is economical, the benefits of making
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new
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tracks
for
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fast
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trains
are more significant.
Hence
, more should
be spent
on
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trains
rather
than the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
systems.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 4 - Explain how the examples of tying shoes and learning to type demonstrate the principle of audience effects. - Preparation Time: 30 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
342 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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