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11. If your teacher makes a mistake, it is better to correct the teacher or ignore themistake? Use reasons to support response. v.1

11. If your teacher makes a mistake, it is better to correct the teacher or ignore themistake? Use reasons to support response. v. 1
Governments across continents have turned their attention to more sustainable sources of energy as alternatives to fossil fuel. In my opinion, this could be seen as a progress for the following reasons. First, there is no arguing that producing energy from buried dead organisms lacks sustainability, which means such production could not guarantee the survival of humans in the long term. In fact, the consumption of energy generated from fossil fuel tends to accelerate in direct correlation with the growth of the world population. With the current rate of exploitation, this valuable resource would dwindle away in no time, leaving no other choices than seeking additional reserves such as nuclear power or hydroelectricity. This is a safe solution to the fear of energy scarcity and ensures the future development of the human race. Second, dependence on fossil fuel for worldwide energy supply would cause environmental degradation while using solar power, for example, is considered an ultimate choice of energy conservation. The combustion of fossil fuels is the culprit of greenhouse gas emission and other air pollutants, leading to tremendous damage to the environment. Such suffering of the Earth could not be justified by the growing need of humans. By contrast, this would never be the case when it comes to other alternatives as mentioned above. If governments continue to invest in exploiting those new sources, there will be an unlimited amount of inexpensive energy on the long run. In conclusion, I believe that the use of other potential energy sources to replace fossil fuel is obviously an important step forward.
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Governments
across continents have turned their attention to more sustainable sources of
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energy
as alternatives to
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fossil
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fuel
. In my opinion, this could be
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seen
as
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a progress
for the following reasons.

First
, there is no arguing that producing
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energy
from buried dead organisms lacks sustainability, which means such production could not guarantee the survival of humans in the long term. In fact, the consumption of
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energy
generated from
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fossil
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fuel
tends to accelerate in direct correlation with the growth of the world population. With the
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current
rate of exploitation, this valuable resource would dwindle away in no time, leaving no
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other
choices than seeking additional reserves such as nuclear power or hydroelectricity. This is a safe solution to the fear of
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energy
scarcity and ensures the future development of the human race.

Second, dependence on
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fossil
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fuel
for worldwide
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energy
supply would cause environmental degradation while using solar power,
for example
,
is considered
an ultimate choice of
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energy
conservation. The combustion of
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fossil
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fuels
is the culprit of greenhouse gas emission and
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other
air pollutants, leading to tremendous damage to the environment. Such
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suffering of
the Earth could not
be justified
by the growing need of humans. By contrast, this would never be the case when it
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comes
to
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other
alternatives as mentioned above. If
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governments
continue to invest in exploiting those new sources, there will be an unlimited amount of inexpensive
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energy
on the long run.

In conclusion
, I believe that the
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use
of
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other
potential
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energy
sources to replace
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fossil
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fuel
is
obviously
an
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important
step forward.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay 11. If your teacher makes a mistake, it is better to correct the teacher or ignore themistake? Use reasons to support response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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