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If your teacher makes a mistake, it is better to correct the teacher or ignore themistake? Use reasons to support response. v.1

If your teacher makes a mistake, it is better to correct the teacher or ignore themistake? Use reasons to support response. v. 1
The recent decades have witnessed several epidemics on a global, and become a great concern for medical faculty. Therefore, it is arguably that scientists ought to prepare safety measure instead of finding a treatment when a viral infection occurs. This essay disagrees with the statement and will discuss why sometimes diseases cannot be prevented and hence researching is required to cure them. There are a number of diseases that cannot be prevented through precaution such as measles, polio, chicken pox etc. Moreover, there are diseases which are genetically linked and people who have defective genes will contract these illnesses at some point of time. Therefore, in such cases, one has to visit a hospital and get necessary treatment in order to get cured. For instance, Type 1 diabetes, Alzheimer’s, Parkinson’s disease and certain types of cancers are hereditary and they can only be treated through medication and therapy. Without research, treatment for non preventable diseases will not be possible. In addition to that, there will always be a new disease outbreak due to the evolution of bacteria and viruses. Recently, many people suffered from Ebola fever that led to the death of patients in severe cases. The causative virus also affects the development of the fetus in pregnant women. Therefore, we need to actively conduct research and arm ourselves to tackle unknown as well as non preventable diseases. To conclude, prevention should be practiced as a precaution to avoid getting sick, but this will not help us avoid certain illnesses which require medical intervention. Hence, research is absolutely required to develop vaccines, medicines and medical procedures to deal with genetically linked diseases and non preventable diseases.
The recent decades have witnessed several epidemics on a global, and become a great concern for medical faculty.
Therefore
, it is
arguably
that scientists ought to prepare safety measure
instead
of finding a treatment when a viral infection occurs. This essay disagrees with the statement and will discuss why
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sometimes
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diseases
cannot be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevented
and
hence
researching
is required
to cure them.

There are a number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
diseases
that cannot be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevented
through precaution such as measles, polio, chicken pox etc.
Moreover
, there are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
diseases
which are
genetically
linked and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who have defective genes will contract these illnesses at
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
point of time.
Therefore
, in such cases, one
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has to
visit a hospital and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
necessary treatment in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
cured.
For instance
, Type 1 diabetes, Alzheimer’s, Parkinson’s
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disease
and certain types of cancers are
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
hereditary and
they can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be treated
through medication and therapy.

Without research, treatment for
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non preventable
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diseases
will not be possible.
In addition
to that, there will always be a new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
disease
outbreak due to the evolution of bacteria and viruses. Recently,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
suffered from Ebola fever that led to the death of patients in severe cases. The causative virus
also
affects the development of the fetus in pregnant women.
Therefore
, we need to
actively
conduct research and arm ourselves to tackle unknown
as well
as
It appears that a hyphen is missing.
non preventable
diseases.

To conclude
, prevention should
be practiced
as a precaution to avoid getting sick,
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but
this will not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
us avoid certain illnesses which require medical intervention.
Hence
, research is
absolutely
required to develop vaccines, medicines and medical procedures to deal with
genetically
linked
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
diseases
and
It appears that a hyphen is missing.
non preventable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
diseases
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay If your teacher makes a mistake, it is better to correct the teacher or ignore themistake? Use reasons to support response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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