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Independent speaking ( question 1)Which place has fond memories for you? Describe this place and explain why it is memorable to you. v.1

Independent speaking ( question 1)Which place has fond memories for you? Describe this place and explain why it is memorable to you. v. 1
For many years, public libraries are considered to be very important rooms for learning, especially for those who cannot afford to buy certain books. However, with the advancement in technology nowadays, people believe that public libraries are not necessary for people, while others disagree with this opinion. In this essay i will discuss both views and suggest my opinion. To begin with, the public libraries still serve great importance in the society, this is because it enables everyone willing to study, have access to all kinds of books, and read the one that interest them. For example, during my primary education, the public library helped a lot of children to develop reading ability and strengthen their interest in reading. Therefore, children who are used to reading will find it easy to study and understand quickly. On the other hand, the advancement in technology has made things very easy and achievable, people no longer need the library to find certain books that interest them, since all of these books can be downloaded from the internet. For example, during my tertiary education, we are being asked to submit our assignment through the internet, and most of the answers for these assignments are gotten from the internet. However, not many people would prefer reading trough the internet because some people find it easy to read hard copy materials. In conclusion, although technological advancement has made studying easier, the public libraries still serve great importance in the society, especially for children, to enable them to develop their reading ability.
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, while others disagree with this opinion. In this essay
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, and read the one that interest them.
For example
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public
library
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easy and achievable,
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people
no longer need the library to find certain
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books
that interest them, since all of these
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books
can
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from the internet.
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, during my tertiary education, we are
being asked
to submit our assignment through the internet, and most of the answers for these assignments
are gotten
from the internet.

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hard
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In conclusion
, although technological advancement has made studying easier, the
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public
libraries
still
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especially
for children, to enable them to develop their
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reading
ability.
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IELTS essay Independent speaking ( question 1)Which place has fond memories for you? Describe this place and explain why it is memorable to you. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
255 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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