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1. Some people say that E- books and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree. v.1

1. Some people say that E- books and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines v. 1
The advanced technology has developed immensely in the recent years and has brought numerous changes in the field of paper media. There are people in the society who now think that the conventional newspaper and magazines will be completely succeeded by E - books, E - newspapers and many other technologies in the near future. In my opinion, I completely agree with the statement as the benefits associated with these latest technologies are plentiful. To start with, let's discuss the major advantages of information available online through various means such as E- News Papers, E - Magazines, E- Books, etc. Firstly, it's easily available and cheap as well. Any person who wants to access any kind of news can get it online and with variety. For instance, if we take an example of a newspaper generally a person would read a single newspaper in a day. However, as almost all the paper based news is available online now, one can read multiple newspapers from one platform without the need of paying any money. Secondly, magazines are difficult to find in most of the stores, but are easily found online. Thirdly, students use to suffer a lot while finding books which could help them in scoring good marks, but with the latest E - Books and online videos, it has become a quite convenient and affordable experience for the young generation. For example, housewives who have good teaching skills are now using certain websites to showcase their talent by uploading easy to understand materials for the students while they are preparing for their examinations. In conclusion, I feel the urban people are quite aware of this new trend. On the other hand, the rural population doesn't have much idea about it. Hence, the government should take measures to promote online content in these areas as well, which could help them in growing and understanding things better.
The advanced technology has developed
immensely
in the recent years and has brought numerous
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changes
in the field of paper media. There are
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people
in the society who
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now
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think
that the conventional
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newspaper
and magazines will be completely succeeded by E
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books
, E
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-
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newspapers
and
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many
other technologies in the near future. In my opinion, I completely
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agree
with the statement as the benefits associated with these latest technologies are plentiful.

To
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start
with,
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let
's discuss the major advantages of information available
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online
through various means such as E-
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News
Papers, E
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-
Magazines, E-
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Books
, etc.
Firstly
, it's
easily
available and
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cheap
as well
. Any person who wants to access any kind of
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news
can
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get
it
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online
and with variety.
For instance
, if we take an example of a
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newspaper
generally
a person would read a single
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newspaper
in a day.
However
, as almost all the paper based
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news
is available
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online
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now
, one can read multiple
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newspapers
from one platform without the need of paying any money.
Secondly
, magazines are difficult to find in most of the stores,
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but
are
easily
found online.

Thirdly
, students
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use to
suffer a lot while finding
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books
which could
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help
them in scoring
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good
marks,
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but
with the latest E
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-
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Books
and
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online
videos, it has become a quite convenient and affordable experience for the young generation.
For example
, housewives who have
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good
teaching
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skills
are
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now
using certain websites to showcase their talent by uploading easy to understand materials for the students while they are preparing for their examinations.

In conclusion
, I feel the urban
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people
are quite aware of this
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new
trend.
On the other hand
, the rural population doesn't have much
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idea
about it.
Hence
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should take measures to promote
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
content in these areas
as well
, which could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them in growing and understanding things better.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay 1. Some people say that E- books and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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